Talk:Lonely Among Us/GA1

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 17:46, 3 June 2013 (UTC) I will review sometime this week. Glimmer721 ^talk 17:46, 3 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"originally aired on November 2, 1987" - either "originally airing" or "that originally aired" (without the comma before it)

Changed to "that" without the comma. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps say, "as well as the second appearance of Colm Meaney, who would later play The Next Generation and Deep Space Nine character Miles O'Brien." Adds the significance.

Done. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps add more to the lead about the writing of the particular episode.

Added - particularly the mention of "Journey to Babel". Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Are there really only 3 other actors aside from the regulars? Just checking.

There were only three guest stars credited - I think the majority of the alien actors were probably stunt actors. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"...sedates Worf and brings him to sickbay..." Is it just "sickbay" or "the sickbay"? I can't remember which was used more commonly.

I changed it to the sickbay, its better grammatically at least. :) Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"This episode was subsequently compared to "Journey to Babel" → "Lonely Among Us" was subsequently compared to "Journey to Babel...". Just to avoid confusion.

Changed as suggested.

"who had previously worked on shows such as V and The Six Million Dollar Man." Italicize the titles of the TV shows.

Fixed. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure "rewatched" needs the hyphen.

Fixed. Not sure how that one snuck in. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I also made a few small grammatical changes elswhere.
This seems like a fansite. I'm not sure the sentence it sources is very relevant anyway; it seems like trivia. Ditto with ref #5.

I've removed those sections. Miyagawa (talk) 17:25, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I notice that in this article you've combined the home media releases to the reception section, which is different from the other season 1 articles you've done. I like this article's format better, but if you're aiming for a Good Topic in the future than you'll want to get them with all the same, whether the changes be made here or to the other articles.

Yeah, this was the format I'd been using for Enterprise and the Deep Space Nine ones - I thought it looked neater rather than the ones with a single line or two for a section. Once I get all the season 1 articles up to scratch I'll need to go back through the earlier ones and upgrade them to current formatting. I know I've used a couple of different formats for the reference sections, and I found the viewing figures only about half way through, so I need to go back through and add those to the other articles. Miyagawa (talk) 17:25, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm putting this on hold for 7 days while the above (minor) issues are addressed. Overall the article is good. I think I may have seen this episode, actually...the "dress uniforms" rings a bell! Weren't they basically wearing skirts? Glimmer721 ^talk 01:04, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review - yeah, they never could get those dress uniforms to look right. They admittedly weren't as bad as the miniskirts that they had some of the male crewmembers wear, although I think really only the dress uniforms introduced in Insurrection were OK. The rest were horrid. Miyagawa (talk) 17:21, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All right, I will pass now. Glimmer721 ^talk 20:45, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]