Talk:Logan Sapphire/GA1

GA Review

Passed. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:38, 22 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 15:32, 20 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there, I'll review this article. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:32, 20 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Not a very long article so not a ton of comments here, but the article is quite good quality-wise regardless. Placing on hold. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:21, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

link Carat (mass) in first sentence
Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I feel as though it would sound more natural to say "The Logan Sapphire has been on display in the National Gem Collection of the National Museum of Natural History in Washington, D.C., since [year]", as opposed to using "As of" (same thing for the second-to-last sentence of the article), though if you disagree, then "As of" should use {{As of}} rather than plain text.
I like that, changed to "since 1971". DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Description

I'd link carat here too
Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"it had not previously undergone heat treatment" → link Heat treating
Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"The Logan Sapphire is one of the largest faceted blue sapphires in the world" → does this mean it has the largest faces? This is a bit unclear
No, this was meant to convey that of the faceted blue sapphires in the world, it is one of the largest of them (so referring to the entire gemstone). This was a little tricky, but I switched "faceted" and "blue", so that it now reads "one of the largest blue faceted sapphires in the world" – does that extra separation between "largest" and "faceted" help? DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"The diamonds were likely taken from an antique bracelet or necklace." → This sentence is unsourced; if it uses Ref 2 at the end of the next sentence, just use Ref 2 here again
Yep, ref 2 (source: "A close examination of the setting reveals that the round diamonds surrounding the sapphire likely were part of an antique necklace or bracelet that was repurposed to make the sapphire brooch/pendant.") → re-added the footnote as suggested

History

"It is a "Ceylon sapphire", a name given to Sri Lankan sapphires" → I'm not sure how necessary this is, but it could potentially be helpful to note that "Ceylon" used to be the name of Sri Lanka
Done! I included it as a brief note since the term is pretty common. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"likely originates from Ratnapura, the "City of Gems"" → recommend adding "known as" before "the"
Good call, done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"was Sir Victor Sassoon, 3rd Baronet of Bombay" → expand link to Victor Sassoon to cover from "Sir" to "Baronet of Bombay", like this: Victor Sassoon, 3rd Baronet of Bombay
Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"It was exhibited at the 1939 New York World's Fair in 1939" → remove bolded part (emphasis is mine) as redundant
Whoops! Got rid of it. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Same "as of" point as in lead
Changed this one. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

Everything looks good here - formatting is good too.

Images

File:Logan Sapphire 10956420 cropped.png – Good Public domain, relevant, and good caption
File:Natural History Museum - Logan Sapphire (2).jpg – Good License is fine, relevant, and good caption

Hi PCN02WPS, thanks for the review! These comments were helpful, I've responded to each of them above. Let me know if you have any additional feedback or comments! DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, this one looks good to me! I'm happy with the changes and I don't see anything else that would warrant fixing so I'm happy to give this a pass. Well done! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:37, 22 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.