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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk contribs count) 20:26, 12 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

This article is in decent shape, but a few minor things require fixing

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
    A lot of activity - is this stable?
    Overall, the article has been very stable. Mostly rewriting and summarizing the text over the past few months. -Fnlayson (talk) 18:18, 27 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Good luck with improving this article!

Comments

  1. Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor links to 1 redirect which points back. F-22 (redirect page) -> Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor checkY
  2. Spelling errors: "identifing" checkY
  3. Links required: supercruise" checkY
  4. Awkward text:
    1. A stealth ordnance pod and pylon is being developed, designed to carry additional weapons internally Considered deleting "designed" checkY
    2. However, the stealth features of the F-22 require additional maintenance, decreasing their mission capable rate to approximately 62–70% You've use "however" in two sentences running. checkY
    3. In December 2007, Secretary of the Air Force Michael Wynne requested that the F-22 be deployed to the Middle East, Secretary of Defense Gates rejected this option. Run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop. checkY
    4. In August 2011 the grounding was temporarily waived so that fighters could be flown out of the path of a hurricane One sentence paragraph belongs in previous paragraph. Preferably as the second-last sentence. checkY
    5. The aircraft's radar-absorbing metallic skin is a principal cause of maintenance, skin repairs account for more than half of all maintenance. Run-on sentence. Replace comma with semi-colon or full stop. checkY
    6. A source of maintenance problems is that many components require custom hand-fitting and are not interchangeable. Should be: "Another source of maintenance problems'" checkY
    7. The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, refurbishments are at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours Run-on sentence. Suggest replacing comma with conjunction The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, with refurbishments at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours checkY
    8. All F-22s were grounded after the crash, operations resumed following a review. Another run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop. checkY
    9. An Air Force Materiel Command investigation found that Cooley momentarily lost consciousness during a high-G maneuver then ejected when he found himself too low to recover Insert comma before "then" checkY

Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:27, 13 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. We'll work on continued improvements to the article. -Fnlayson (talk) 16:03, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think it would make a Featured Article now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:30, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]