Talk:Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor/GA1
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk • contribs • count) 20:26, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
This article is in decent shape, but a few minor things require fixing
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
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- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
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- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- A lot of activity - is this stable?
- Overall, the article has been very stable. Mostly rewriting and summarizing the text over the past few months. -Fnlayson (talk) 18:18, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
- A lot of activity - is this stable?
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Good luck with improving this article!
- Pass/Fail:
Comments
- Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor links to 1 redirect which points back. F-22 (redirect page) -> Lockheed Martin F-22 Raptor
- Spelling errors: "identifing"
- Links required: supercruise"
- Awkward text:
- A stealth ordnance pod and pylon is being developed, designed to carry additional weapons internally Considered deleting "designed"
- However, the stealth features of the F-22 require additional maintenance, decreasing their mission capable rate to approximately 62–70% You've use "however" in two sentences running.
- In December 2007, Secretary of the Air Force Michael Wynne requested that the F-22 be deployed to the Middle East, Secretary of Defense Gates rejected this option. Run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop.
- In August 2011 the grounding was temporarily waived so that fighters could be flown out of the path of a hurricane One sentence paragraph belongs in previous paragraph. Preferably as the second-last sentence.
- The aircraft's radar-absorbing metallic skin is a principal cause of maintenance, skin repairs account for more than half of all maintenance. Run-on sentence. Replace comma with semi-colon or full stop.
- A source of maintenance problems is that many components require custom hand-fitting and are not interchangeable. Should be: "Another source of maintenance problems'"
- The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, refurbishments are at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours Run-on sentence. Suggest replacing comma with conjunction The canopy visibility degrades more rapidly than expected, with refurbishments at 331 flight hours on average, instead of the required 800 hours
- All F-22s were grounded after the crash, operations resumed following a review. Another run-on sentence. Replace comma with full stop.
- An Air Force Materiel Command investigation found that Cooley momentarily lost consciousness during a high-G maneuver then ejected when he found himself too low to recover Insert comma before "then"
Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:27, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. We'll work on continued improvements to the article. -Fnlayson (talk) 16:03, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
- I think it would make a Featured Article now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:30, 3 October 2011 (UTC)