Talk:Little Mix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bencherlite (talk · contribs) 19:19, 14 December 2011 (UTC)

This is a quick fail. Lots of unsourced material, not just where there are "citation needed" tags. Tabloid newspapers used as sources. And the style of writing is very poor. To give a couple of examples:

• Before Little Mix, she was a student.[citation needed tag] Perrie’s parents split up when she was young and she has an older brother Jonnie [dreadful phrasing]. Perrie was a student before The X Factor [yes we know that] and Perrie [why are we calling her "Perrie" all the time, by the way?] did her audition ["auditioned", perhaps?] in Glasgow because that’s [that is] where her grandfather Hugh Hogg came from. [So what? Source for any of this?]
• Jesy Nelson (20), from Essex, was a member of the Danceworks Studios club but didn’t really perform before the X Factor [and what does that mean?]. In fact [since when do decently written articles use "In fact"?], her mum said she only started singing this year and she worked as a barmaid. [You can almost hear the clunk of gears as that sentence changes direction.]

I could go on but I won't. Nowhere close to being GA standard. Bencherlite^Talk 19:26, 14 December 2011 (UTC)