Talk:Little Athletics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this. give me a couple of days to review this. ΤheQ Editor ^Talk? 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@TheQ Editor:, just a friendly reminder about this GAN. It has been a couple of days. NickGibson3900 ^Talk ^{Sign my Guestbook} ^{Contributions} 07:55, 28 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@NickGibson3900: Sorry, my laptop's internet went down just as I clicked the submit button. I re wrote it. Cheers, ΤheQ Editor ^Talk? 18:22, 28 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

It's too much like an ad. 3 paragraphs dedicated in explaining how great "Little Athletics" is? You should also consider including a brief history of it. Done
The body doesn't mention anything about "Little A's or Little Aths" Removed

Little Athletics Events

Change heading to "Events" Done
What do all those abbreviations stand for? (VIC) (NSW) (QLD) (SA) (WA) (TAS) (ACT) Linked
Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. Fixed

Structure and Governance

Consider merging the two paragraphs together. Merged

History

There are a lot of short sub sections in section 3.2.1. Perhaps merging the short ones together would help. Merged
The sub section titles contain peacock phrases. It sounds more like an essay. You should just include the year. Changed title
Section 3.2.2 contains a lot of in line citations to the same ref. Consider only adding it at the end of the paragraph. Done
Same thing with section "3.2.3", "3.2.4", and "3.2.5" Done
"Geelong brach" - is this a typo? Fixed
"However Billingham still could not get support for Little Athletics from VAAA instead they suggested to drop the junior competition and focus on the rapidly expanding senior one." - no punctuation in between? Rephrased
"VAAA and they accepted both" - should be "VAAA and both were accepted" Rephrased
"200 boys and girls more than 200 boys and girls" - doesn't make sense Fixed

Current

"little athletes" - should just be athletes Fixed

Other

one dead link. See here Fixed
External Links go after the References Moved

Reply

@TheQ Editor: Thanks for the review. I think I have fixed all the problems with this article. NickGibson3900 ^Talk ^{Sign my Guestbook} ^{Contributions} 07:31, 29 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]