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Nominator: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 21:53, 2 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a. (reference section):
- b. (citations to reliable sources):
- c. (OR):
- d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a. (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a. (major aspects):
- b. (focused):
- a. (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/fail:
- Pass/fail:
(Criteria marked are unassessed)
We are reunited once again for this review! --K. Peake 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- The infobox recording date of 2014 is not sourced in the body anywhere
- Removed
- WP:OVERLINK of Porter Robinson under songwriters
- Fixed
- Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
- Fixed
- The first sentence should mention it being from his debut studio album, Worlds (2014)
- Added
- Move the release sentence to the fourth of the paragraph instead and change to the album rather than its title
- Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- "The track was one of" → "It was one of"
- Done
- I would suggest starting a new para at the Passion Pit and re-word it to something like "The song was noted for the influence from Passion Pit."
- Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- Add after the above sentence one about the song's critical reviews
- As with "Sad Machine" I prefer adding sentences regarding reviews only when sources explicitly comment on it. In the case of "Sad Machine", critics generally agreed on its atmospheric feeling, but here I don't think there's an easy way to summarize the reviews, otherwise it would get too extensive. However I added another sentence saying that critics noted that "it was the first on Worlds with a faster tempo". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- "a music video was" → "an accompanying music video was" with the wikilink, add info about the synopsis too
- Done
- Mention which charts it entered
- I think that's too much info considering the length of the article; it would be almost the same as the last paragraph of "Release and reception".
Background and composition
[edit]- Add info about the synths to the audio sample too
- I don't see that info in the article, but I added that "Multiple critics found it influenced by Passion Pit".
- Add the release year of Space Invaders in brackets
- Done
- Pipe electro-house to Electro house
- Done
- Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication)
- Done
- "found it inspired by Passion Pit" → "found it inspired by the band" to avoid using their name so much
- Done
- Merge the Las Vegas Weekly and Spin sentences by using a comma with "while"
- I don't think these sentences are related enough, unlike the previous one about Passion Pit.
Release and reception
[edit]- "On June 3, "Lionhearted" was" → "On June 3, 2014, "Lionhearted" was" and move [6] to being solely at the end of the sentence
- Done
- "on the 17th, accompanied by a music video" → "on June 17, accompanied by a music video" with the wikilink
- Done
- Put parts of the longer reviews quoted into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE
- Done
- 'St Elmo's Fire' should be surrounded by single speech marks and piped to St Elmo's fire
- Done
- Pipe Variance to Variance (magazine)
- Done
- Pipe Beat to Beat (magazine)
- That's a red link, and it's currently linked to Beat Magazine.
- "described it as" → "described the song as"
- Done
- Mention what the positions the song charted at were, although I do not see the Ultratop Dance one sourced
- Done
Track listing
[edit]- Good
Personnel
[edit]- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel- Done
Charts
[edit]Weekly charts
[edit]- I can not see the Dance position in the source
Year-end charts
[edit]- Good
Release history
[edit]- Worldwide → Various
- Done
- You need to add sources for these releases
- Done
References
[edit]- Copyvio score checks out since nothing shows up and there is not violations of quotes I see myself anyway!!
- What is DJ Times and why is it reliable on ref 2?
- WP:ABOUTSELF should apply as I'm just using Robinson's words here. Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- Pipe AXS to AXS (company) on ref 5
- Done
- Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication) on ref 7
- Done
- Rather than being in the title, cite Apple Music as publisher with the wikilink on ref 13
- Done
- Pipe Variance to Variance (magazine) on ref 16
- Done
- Pipe Beat to Beat (magazine) on ref 17
- That's a red link, and it's currently linked to Beat Magazine.
External links
[edit]- Link to music video in the infobox instead of here
- Keeping both Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this went by very quickly! --K. Peake 20:33, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: all responded! Skyshiftertalk 21:36, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
- Skyshifter I have done some copy editing for you now, although you still need to add various sources to back up the Apple Music releases being in various locations; try about three or four regions please. --K. Peake 09:09, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: I'm having trouble with that (i.e. I can't find the Lionhearted single on streaming services) so I've removed the section. Skyshiftertalk 09:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, well done on cleaning this up! --K. Peake 11:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)