Talk:Line of Duty series 2/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 01:24, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: TheDoctorWho (talk · contribs) 07:01, 23 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 01:45, 7 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Not much to say. The article is solid; I've identified some places for more commas, but I go light-touch on the CinS on British English articles. There is one sentence that has an unusual number of typos in it, though. It's sat for a while at GAN, so consider looking it over with fresh eyes. Ping me when done.

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

Lead

The second series of the British police procedural television programme Line of Duty, was broadcast on BBC Two between 12 February and 19 March 2014. This is not a necessary comma.
AC-12 is led by Superintendent Ted Hastings (Adrian Dunbar) who is assisted Add comma after parenthetical
Hawes performance should be Hawes's performance, MOS:'S

Episodes

The witness is hospitalisedX and all police officers are killed Comma needed at the X, WP:CINS
Should be "Akers's"
Denton is transferred to a missing persons unitX and Fleming goes undercover as her assistant. Comma needed at the X, WP:CINS
15-year-old needs two hyphens.
but the team do not believe herX and Hastings arrests her for conspiracy. Comma needed at the X, WP:CINS
Hastings has financial problems (something he previously cited as making Denton vulnerable to bribery) and Fleming's mobile phone has an "interesting" call history (alluding to her affair with Richard Akers). This needs a serial comma after the parenthetical due to the length of the statements
Prasad kills Cole for being "a liability", before Denton manages to escape from her kidnappers. Remove comma
In flashback, events prior to the ambush Denton follows Dryden to the reception, This feels incomplete. Maybe In flashback, prior to the ambush, Denton follows Dryden to the reception,
She later approaches HunterX but DS Akers intervenes. Comma needed at the X, WP:CINS

Production

Ruairi O'Brien also returned as the series' Director of Photography. "series's", MOS:'S
The headquarters of Invest Northern Ireland doubled as Anti-Corruption Unit 12's office buildingX while the exterior of Belfast Central Library served as the police headquarters façade. Improve readability with a comma
One scene filmed with McClure, Compston, and Bonnar covered 18-pages of a script "18 pages", not an 18-page (hyphenated compound adjective) script
Due to the success of the second series a third and fourth series was commissioned in April 2014 should be "were"

Reception

"fouth" fix
eight highest-rated should be eighth-highest-rated
"mainted" should be "maintained"
the series "smash[ed] gender stereotypes." MOS:LOGICAL should be period outside quote.

Sourcing and spot checks

Only sources of note are the Amazon ones for release dates of the various home media publications.

9: There was also such a great reaction to the Adrian Dunbar character (Superintendent Ted Hastings) that we wanted to bring him back as well. ... He was promoted to the main cast in season 2. What was your original vision for Hastings? Y
20: filming also took place over a number of weekends at an office block occupied by Invest NI (AC12 HQ), while the exterior of Central Library doubled up as the facade of police headquarters. Y
30: March 24, 2014, listed as the release date for the UK import of series two. Y
46: Writer Jed Mercurio has come up with a thrilling, multi-stranded sequel, easily as good, if not better, than Series 1 This seems to work for the claim of a stronger story than Series 1. Y
47: Lennie James might be missed, but Keeley Hawes proves herself a very, very decent follow-up. Y
54: 1. LINE OF DUTY Y

Images

The non-free season album art has an NFUR. The Keeley Hawes image is CC-BY 2.0. Encouragement: Add alt text for both images.

Response

@Sammi Brie: Thanks so much for another review! Commas and plurals are obviously my weakness. 😅 In the plot summaries at least, most of the grammatical errors probably came from the fact that I had to trim the summaries and missed a few things in the process.

I believe that I've addressed everything. While I know the Amazon sources aren't the best, they do fall under WP:RSPAMAZON, specifically the part that says "Amazon is a reliable source for basic information about a work (such as release date, ISBN, etc.)" Unfortunately DVD releases aren't covered as much as they were in the early 2000s. I'm hoping to find better sources for those dates eventually so that I can get the parent article to FA down the road. If/when I do, I'll return to update them. TheDoctorWho (talk) 06:06, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TheDoctorWho I wasn't saying the Amazon sources were bad, just that they were there (and indeed are acceptable for that use). Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:10, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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