Talk:Like a Prayer (song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk • contribs • count) 10:29, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
- Intro
- "She wanted to have surface meanings ", can you reword, it is a little awkward.
- "while rock guitar sounds kept it dark and mysterious.", seems a little OR. The guitar is a funkier style in this song and I'd say it is a far from dark/mysterious. I'd say the choir gives it more atmosphere, not the guitar.
- Background
- "But she understood that as she was growing up so was her audience." comma?
- "Always the instinctive woman that she was, " reword Always an instinctive woman
- Recording
- "He knows what he's going to to and he knows what he needs to tell them". to to?
- "As Madonna recuperated from the fight" you make it sound as if Leonard knocked her out and bruised her!
- "However, the person pulled out at the last minute, which irritated Madonna greatly, and she started shouting at Leonard saying "If this fucking guy can't get a fucking drummer to turn up, then he isn't fucking playing on my record" not sure this is really appropriate. Obviously studio work can get heated.
This is a good article with all the main points but I'm not convinced the quality of the prose is up to scratch. A lot of its reads like a story/narrative rather than encyclopedic writing. I'll request a second opinion.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:07, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
- I have copy-edited the article completely and reduced about 18KB worth of prose. You can start now. — Legolas (talk2me) 18:37, 19 September 2011 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- B. MoS compliance:
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Articles looks to have improved. Contains a lot of informationbut I feel if it is ever to make FA the prose needs further improvement. Satisfies GA criteria though.♦ Dr. Blofeld 07:55, 20 September 2011 (UTC)