Talk:Lift Yourself/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: LOVI33 (talk · contribs) 15:00, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
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You guys are the two editors I work with the most, so it will be cool to review an article you guys nominated together. LOVI33 15:00, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
- Request
May I request we please address the genres in the infobox? I'm not sure if "scat" is considered a music genre. Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:09, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
- Another Believer I have contributed to this discussion on the talk page now. --K. Peake 20:14, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- I am aware that there is currently a discussion going on if "scat" is a musical genre, but are you sure it should be included in the infobox even if it is, as you are referring specifically to West's vocals, not the song itself.
- Thank you for your awareness and the discussion has been solved by now, though it should have been if classified as a genre because it would not have been writing "scatting" --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- Introduce Drake, Smokepurpp, and Pusha T
Not done they are introduced solely in the body so should only be kept as having introductions there --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- "An avant-garde track, the song samples" → "The song is an avant-garde track that includes a sample of" to avoid repeated sentence structure
Done with changes because I can't say "includes a sample of..." then list two songs directly afterwards --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- Confirm that the "proper lyrics" version is unreleased
- Done if this is fine --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Background and development
[edit]- Target "right-wing political views" to Right-wing politics
- Great prose writing!
Composition
[edit]- Retitle to "Composition and lyrics" to be more specific
- Done but I did not do this initially due to not being sure if it would be needed, as West raps nonsensical words on the song --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Release and reception
[edit]Commercial performance
[edit]- Merge into 1 paragraph as short paragraphs are discouraged since they can inhibit the flow of the text.
- Done because this can be a one-para section, as the others are all at two or more so an outlier is fine --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Live performances and other usage
[edit]- Looks good!
Track listing
[edit]- Are you sure this section is needed since there is only one track listing?
- Shouldn't it be included for verification of the length, plus it is not titled track listings? --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Looks good!
Charts
[edit]- Looks good!
Release history
[edit]- Are you sure this section is needed since there is only one release date?
- Not required, just thought it would be a neat addition --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
Notes
[edit]- "West's eight studio" → "West's eighth studio"
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks good at 31.5%.
- Great job on the citations, all of them look good. I just noticed a few are unarchived, please archive them
External links
[edit]- Looks Good!
Final comments and verdict
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On hold for now. I just have a few concerns but overall, it is an amazing article and is definitely ready for GA. LOVI33 16:43, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- LOVI33 I have made the fixes now, are you ready to pass this? --K. Peake 16:57, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake definitely! ✓ Pass. LOVI33 17:10, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.