Talk:Liberty Walk/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 1111tomica (talk · contribs) 02:28, 19 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

What is the status of this review? 15 days has gone by with no form of review. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 12:59, 5 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I think he forgot about it... Till I Go Home (talk) 01:18, 6 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No I didn't. I will review it. But the thing is I am busy as hell in real life. I will review it for sure Till I Go Home. — Tomica (talk) 08:42, 6 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

1111tomica, please withdraw so that others can have the opportunity to review. If no one has done so by the time you're ready to start the review, you certainly can have it back. Two Hearted River (paddle / fish) 23:46, 14 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will finally start the review! I am apologizing you Till I Go Home for your waiting, I hope you understand. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There are no disambiguation link or dead references. Good. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

No issues — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

stage name ---> stage-name — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

I think that you forgot Palmer as a producer in the lead. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Cyrus explained that lyrical inspiration for the song was from female empowerment. ---> Cyrus explained that the theme of female empowerment was a lyrical inspiration for the song. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Musically, "Liberty Walk" is an uptempo dance-pop song which consists of rapped verses by the singer. ---> Musically, "Liberty Walk" is an uptempo dance-pop song which also contains rapped verses. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

I think that dull should be in quotes. Or am I wrong? — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

"Liberty Walk" peaked at number three on the U.S. Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles Billboard component chart ---> "Liberty Walk" peaked at number three on the U.S. Billboard Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles chart (sometimes it reads better when is simple ;)) — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Background and inspiration

Link Can't Be Tamed and add year of release.— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

In a interview for MTV ---> In a interview for MTV News... — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Cyrus explained the female empowerment behind the lyrical interpretation of "Liberty Walk", saying: ---> Cyrus explained the lyrical inspiration of the song which is about female empowerment, while concluding: — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

I think you should add double quotes ("") on the statement. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

in the same interview ---> in the same interview for the publication — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Again problem with quotes in the last sentence, notice it. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Composition

According to the digital sheet music published by Musicnotes.com, ---> According to the digital sheet music published by Sony/ATV Music Publishing, it is written in the key... — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

The song moves at 120 beats per minute... The song? I actually think that the beat moves, not the song. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

from the notes ... You mean from the note? And also you can add from the low to the high. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Heather Phares of Allmusic noted the song's use... She also noted... It's getting to repetitive. Plus I think you have a grammar mistake in the first sentence. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

italicize The New York Times— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Critical reception

In a positive review of the song, ---> While giving a positive review to the song,...— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Why is radio written with a capital letter? — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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In a more negative review, ... sorry but this reads awkward. Try to re-word it. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

I don't know what, but something bothers me in the section. Give a little bit lifting on it. — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

How do you mean "lifting"? Till I Go Home (talk) 01:52, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Re-writing it. Not all though. Some parts. — Tomica (talk) 08:37, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm I changed it up a little bit. If you are uncomfortable with anything specific in it, please say :) Till I Go Home (talk) 10:23, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances and promotional video

Link House of Blues, Los Angeles and California

Done

Italicize The Hot Hits Live from LA

Done

Track listing

No issues— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

Looks good— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

For the Billboard thing, change the same as in the lead.— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

The song also achieved at peak of number ... It reads bad, Try: The song also reached number— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

US Billboard Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles in the table— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

References

2. The New York Times should be in the work parameter— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

3. MTV should be MTV News— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

4. Peer International Music Publishing should be Sony Music Publishing and also accessdate is needed— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

5. Publisher should be Rovi Corporation— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

9. The Sydney Morning Herald should be in work parameter + publisher is Fairfax Media — Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

11. Change Seattlepi.com to Seattle Post-Intelligencer + place it in the work parameter. Add publisher also Hearst Corporation— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

14. The Hot Hits Live from LA should be in work parameter— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

15. E! Online in publisher parameter— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

18. Publisher is Prometheus Global Media— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

19. Same as 18— Tomica (talk) 16:14, 1 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done

I see that all the issues were addressed. I am passing it. — Tomica (talk) 21:51, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All in all

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: