This is a quick-fail. I looked at a couple citations, and the problems were severe enough to warrant immediate failure. I'm only going to list two examples; please know that you should double-check every citation to every reference to address problems similar to the ones described below. Merely fixing the two or three problems explicitly given below will not be enough.
The paragraphs in the Backgrounds section are missing topic sentences and conclusions to provide an explanation of the information offered.
The quick-fail problems are the cites/references,though:
The sentence beginning "Directorate officers wishing..." is a straightforward case of copyright violation. The text is quoted word for word from the source text, without quotation marks. There is a copyright symbol at the bottom of the source page.
The sentence beginning "This sparked fears..." is sourced to "Albert Wong (25 May 2006). 'Audit chief in deal on judicial review', Hong Kong Standard.". However, I found no mention in that source of fears of potential loss of post-retirement income.
Please double-check every cite to every reference. Make sure the information immediately preceding the citaion actually appears in the cited reference. Please read Wikipedia:Citing sources, and the articles in the "See also" section of that article.
Please feel free to ping me on my talk page (User talk:Ling.Nut) if you have any questions.
