Talk:Les Horvath/GA1

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 14:42, 5 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this.

"Horvath was born to Hungarian immigrants in South Bend, Indiana in 1921, but his family soon moved to Parma, Ohio, a suburb of Cleveland, Ohio", not sure about the use of 'but' here – his birthplace will never change and his family were still immigrants when they moved. I'd suggest removing it and replacing the comma with a semicolon.
"Horvath was small for a football player", was considered small? As you may tell I'm not very educated about American football -- was his eligibility an anomaly, or are small players the norm in the sport now?
"senior halfback Tom Kinkade got most of the carries for Ohio State", wikilink this term as readers outside America/novices to American football may not understand.
"Ohio State's football program, meanwhile, struggled in 1943 after ~~Paul~~ Brown", same under 'Military' section → "where he practiced dentistry and acted as an assistant to ~~Paul~~ Brown"
Little league is not hyphenated

A nicely written and well structured article. No dab or dead links, nor could I find any issues with references and spotchecking. Will pass once comments have been addressed, on hold until then. Lemonade51 (talk) 14:42, 5 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Issues fixed, sans the size issue. Not sure how to explain it better. Nowadays, unless you're solely a player used to run in a straight line down the field for your speed, you're not really going to see players of his size in the game. It was less rare in his time to have a player of his size, actually, which makes the size concerns back then more surprising to a lay reader, i would imagine; at least that's how i interpreted it. Thanks for the review! Wizardman 15:56, 7 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers for the explanation, happy to pass now. Lemonade51 (talk) 18:49, 7 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]