Talk:Lepas testudinata/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:33, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 23:35, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Wow, such invertebrates are very rare at GAN, so I am happy to see it there! My comments follow below:

It's –> Its
Done

Article needs more wikilinks (species, endemic, kelp, instars, and more). Note that terms that were linked in the lead should be linked in the main text again.
Done

and often serves as a foundation species ecologically – I suggest to remove "ecologically" as it is not needed and does not read very well.
Done, reworded

genus Lapas – in italics
Done

The species was likely first described in 1834 – But the taxonbox states Aurivillius, 1892. Note that "first description" means the formal establishment of the name, and that is always unequivocal (or else the taxon would be technically invalid). Maybe you mean something in the lines of "first studied"?
Done, reworded to 'first observed'

In 1892, Carl Wilhelm Samuel Aurivillius classified the species as Lepas testudinata – did he actually re-assign the species, or did he name a separate taxon (which was later synonymised)?
Done

hadn't – had not; they've – they have; these are colloquial
Done

Foster also declared Lepas affinis (named by Lancelot Alexander Borradaile, 1916) a synonym as well – "also" and "as well" are redundant.
Done

Lepas testudinata have – "has", not "have", as you do elsewhere in the article.
Done

Lepas testudinata have two different peduncle (stalk) structures depending on – This is not well formulated (not clear what is dependent). Also, the reader will assume that a single individual has two peduncles that are different.
Done

under go – undergo
Done

Description: That all sounds very general, does it apply to all barnacles? What I really miss here is information specific to this species. How can I identify the species (distinguish it from related species)? This is important, it is what readers often look for.
Done, oh boy this took a bit. So, this is not a particularly popular species (obviously) and finding info was difficult. I managed to track down a good source that discusses some morphological details.

is a driving force – sounds not encyclopedic. "main factor"?
Done

Fiona pinnata predates Lepas – should be introduced "The sea slug Fiona pinnata" or something like that.
Done

Along with other species of Lepas barnicles, Lepas testudinata plays a major risk to biofouling damage – "poses a major rist of"?
Done

it is broadly distributed throughout the China Seas – that is contradictory, as this would be northern hemisphere, not southern as previously stated.
Done

More specifically, it is broadly distributed throughout the China Seas, Australian Sea, and the Indo-West Pacific – doesn't this contradict your earlier statement that it is a cosmopolit in the southern oceans?
Done

range is noncontinuous and is likely broken up by the – there must be a way to say this much more concisely.
Done

The species has not been evaluated by the IUCN Red List – The IUCN evaluates, not the list.
Done

based upon comparison of 18S gene – grammar --Jens Lallensack (talk) 23:35, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Done

@Jens Lallensack: Thank you so much for reviewing this so quickly!! I am currently recovering from a Corneal cross-linking surgery so my vision isn't the best right now. I've still got one good eye but can't tolerate computer screens for more than 10-20 minutes at a time. It will probably take me a few days to fully respond to everything, but I don't see any issue with getting this done within the standard 7-day time frame. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 00:08, 28 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I wish you all the best, and hope you will recover quickly! But do not worry about the time frame, the article will not run away (neither will I). Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:12, 28 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Jens Lallensack Thank you for being patient. I believe I've addressed everything. I apologize if there's any grammar amiss, trying to proof-read with one eye is... a challenge to say the least. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 05:15, 31 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I did some copy edits, please check if these are ok.

We seem to miss a few more wikilinks (e.g., antero-lateral, mitochondrial)

Done, hopefully I got them all

A 2021 study in Marine Biology – I suggest to replace with author names, which is standard elsewhere and outside of Wikipedia. The journal is not really relevant.

Thanks!!!

among select members of the Lepas genus – "among selected members of the genus Lepas"?

Done

Foster concluded that Lepas elongata was synonymous – "is"

Done

Thanks for the anatomical details. But are these details specific for this species? If so, can we state that they are?

Not done, So there isn't much more out there. I found this and this source but I'd debate their reliability.

Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:30, 1 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Jens Lallensack Resolved. I really can't find much else out there for specific descriptions. If you have a source I've missed, I'd greatly appreciate you pointing me in that direction, 'cause otherwise I'm out of sources I can access. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 05:00, 1 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for being unclear; I was rather asking if the specific feature you just added is specific for the species, and if that could be clearly stated, e.g. with "Unlike in related forms" or similar. Jens Lallensack (talk) 10:59, 1 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Jens Lallensack, If I am understanding what you want correctly, you're asking for a physical trait that is specific to this species. I unfortunately don't think such a clarification is possible without WP:OR. 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 00:11, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Fair enough, nothing we can do here, then. I will promote it now, congratulations! Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:30, 2 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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