Talk:Leo Katalinas/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 22:28, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:28, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

• I found it easier to just copyedit it myself. If you disagree with any of the edits, just let me know.
• nickname "Thor," the German god of thunder,, I'm thinking parenthesis would be better here
• There are some references that don't have access-dates (the non-newspaper ones)
• Spot check:
  • Ref 2, 4, 8, 9, 12, 17, 22, 25 all look good.
  • Ref 8: spelling error in sophomores

Nice work, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 02:21, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

• @Gonzo fan2007: Thanks for the review and copyedits - I was in somewhat of a rush writing this so my grammar may not have been the best. I've fixed the other issues but I noticed you made a mistake in one of your copyedits: you changed the sentence He was the second-youngest of four brothers who played football; both his brothers Ed and Joe each played at Georgetown, the latter also played professionally, and John through at least high school to He was the second-youngest of four brothers who played football; both of his brothers—Ed and Joe—each played at Georgetown. The latter also played professionally and the former through at least high school but that makes the sentence incorrect; I may have been a bit sloppy in writing that part, but what I meant to communicate in that sentence was that Leo was the second-youngest of four brothers, with Ed and Joe both playing at Georgetown, Joe also playing professionally, and John, the youngest, playing through at least high school. Can you think of a good way to word it? Thanks. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:11, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

  Maybe just elaborate it a bit? two of his brothers—Ed and Joe—each played at Georgetown, with Joe continuing on to play professionally. The youngest, John, played football at least through high school. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:46, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

  @Gonzo fan2007: I like it. I changed the wording to your suggestion. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:51, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

• Looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:03, 25 August 2023 (UTC)

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