Talk:Leila (Prayaag Akbar novel)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:37, 12 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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"with whom she has a girl, " I think "daughter" would be more appropriate.
"by goons known as repeaters" not sure about the use of "goon" and if they are known by "repeaters" I would expect that to be capitalised.
"party on the doubt of water wastage" I don't understand what this means.
"She one day escapes. She is later caught.." merge, "She one day escapes but is later caught...
"house keeper" one word.
"an advantaged family of the Dixits at the Record Towers" do you mean "the Dixits, an advantaged family at Record Towers"?
"through the bureaucracy," doesn't make sense.
"he neglects to make the arch under due date" -> "he fails to complete the arch by its due date"...
"Feeling for Mrs. Dixit," feeling what?
"her in getting away" -> "her to escape".
"Shalini achieves the richness facility..." what?

... I think I'll need to give it a quickfail here. The prose here is practically beyond my comprehension. It really needs a thorough copyedit to iron out the nuances of the prose right now. I think the rest of it looks alright, but the Plot section needs a complete overhaul. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:17, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]