Talk:Leif J. Sverdrup/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 06:16, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- Aside from my usual copyedit, just a couple of things:
- Should The Sverdrup Medal of the Society of American Military Engineers really have capital "t" for "The"?
- No. Removed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:55, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- I can handle many of Sverdrup's accomplishments continue to serve their missions, but a silent testimony to his engineering skills sounds a bit like a promotional blurb... ;-)
- Fair enough. After all, we do expect the bridges not to fall down... Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:55, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- Aside from my usual copyedit, just a couple of things:
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
- a (fair representation):
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
- a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
- I don't think just repeating the original description found on AWM for the Aitape picture is a great idea; for a start it's partly future tense, which doesn't sit well in an encyclopedic article. At the least, I'd modify "who will control" and preferably drop the anecdotal "who squeezed into Wurtsmith's Lightning".
- Re-phrased. I kind of liked the bit about the big guy squeezing behind the pilot's seat of a P-38. Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:55, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- Heh, you've made me feel bad now - well, I only said "preferably" about removing that bit, so if you really like it... ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:03, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- Re-phrased. I kind of liked the bit about the big guy squeezing behind the pilot's seat of a P-38. Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:55, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- I don't think just repeating the original description found on AWM for the Aitape picture is a great idea; for a start it's partly future tense, which doesn't sit well in an encyclopedic article. At the least, I'd modify "who will control" and preferably drop the anecdotal "who squeezed into Wurtsmith's Lightning".
- a (tagged and captioned):
- Overall:
- a Pass/Fail:
- Interesting character and article; if you can just look at the points noted I'll be happy to pass shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:16, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- Tks mate - passed and well done! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:03, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- Interesting character and article; if you can just look at the points noted I'll be happy to pass shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:16, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
- a Pass/Fail: