Talk:Lee Guetterman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"Drafted by the Mariners in the in the fourth round of the 1981 Major League Baseball (MLB) Draft," - the text in bold is a repetition
"before getting moved to the bullpen due to a loss of control." - loss of control of what?
I think the lead could be three paragraphs instead of two; how about making the new paragraph after he became unhappy with his playing time
"though he was in the minor leagues until June 30." - add that year to the end of this sentence for clarification

"Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958, to Arthur Adam Jr. and Ruth Guetterman.[1][2]" - the first citation can be moved to the comma because it does not mention his parents
"Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958," - born on November 22,
"where he was coached on the baseball team by former major league pitcher Al Worthington.[4][3]" - refs in numerical order please

"because of an injury to Ron Guidry." - The LA Times said Guidry's injury was to his left elbow
"Sure enough, Righetti went on to assume the closer role" - use alternative formal wording in place of the text in bold or delete it
Wikilink go-ahead home run to the relevant article
- Home run is already linked on first mention. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:51, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"then earned ones in back-to-back appearances July 1 and 4," - achieved saves in back-to-back appearances on July 1 and 4,
"As it turned out," - transpired
"in a 2016 interview." - interview with whom?
- No interviewee is shown in the video, but I don't think that's relevant here - the main point of this sentence is that in 2016, Guetterman thought New York was his favorite place that he had played. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Guetterman was then unemployed for over a month before signing with the Mariners again on August 8." - more than a month
"earning the save (his only one of the season) in the victory." - earning him his sole save of the season in the victory
"when Tim Davis broke his leg." - The Spokesman-Review says it was his left leg that was broken
"Blas Minor then relieved him and retired Rex Hudler to end the inning." - subsequently
"finally getting a chance to start again." - reword this sentence slightly

"Guetterman threw a curveball as well.[19][14]" - refs in numerical order please

"due to the preaching and spiritual study he received while a Liberty student. "I made that commitment at Liberty."[19][3]" - refs in numerical order please

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:06, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]