Talk:Le Hardi-class destroyer/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 03:18, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. A few comments/suggestions:
- suggest "The Le Hardi class
was a groupconsisted of twelve" - "able to sustain a speed equal to 30 knots (56 km/h; 35 mph) service speed" two instances of speed here, also what is "service speed", haven't struck that before, also why a speed equal to 30 knots, surely it should just be "a speed of 30 knots"?
- Service speed isn't really defined in the source, but I suspect that it's much slower than trial or even designed speed based on varying fuel loads and foul bottoms as well as weather. Rephrased all this to reduce the repetition of "speed".
- it should probably be 50-caliber Canon de 37 mm Modèle 1933 guns
- suggest "These semi-automatic guns"
- "but when they were unavailable" meaning the guns I assume, not the director?
- It's not clear in the source.
- "When construction was resumed in March 1940"
- "The Germans decided to complete them with and renamed them"
- "When the Vichy French government reestablished the Forces de haute mer (FHM) on 25 September" of what year?
- "and was not completed by the Italians" but the invasion of Vichy France was by the Germans?
- Clarified
- "by Allied bomb
sing in 1944"- To be clear, you think "Allied bombing in 1944" is better?
- Yes, I do. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:04, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
- Fair enough, done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:12, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
- Yes, I do. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:04, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
- To be clear, you think "Allied bombing in 1944" is better?
- "a few months
afterwardlater" - per ELNO, suggest getting rid of uboat.net
Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:02, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review; I have one question though.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:11, 16 November 2019 (UTC)
- No worries. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:22, 16 November 2019 (UTC)