Talk:Lazarus Aaronson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:01, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Will review this. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 15:01, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Can Christianity, economics and coronary heart disease be wikilinked?
  • Wikilinked coronary heart disease. Would consider it wp:overlinking to link the other two very well known and general terms.
• widespread recognition he gained --> widespread recognition, he gained
  • Changed.

Life

• Can tuberculosis, diabetes, socialist, economics, City of London College and coronary heart disease be wikilinked? No problem in repeating links from the lead.
  • Linked all, except socialist and economics
• which occurred on 9 July 1938 "took place" would look better.
  • Well spotted. Changed.
• She subsequently married the geriatrician Oscar Olbrich Does this need to be included?
  • Good point. Removed.
• 1958/59 I think "or" is better than dash, if that is the meaning.
  • Clarified this.
• more than twenty-five years Numbers equal to or greater than 10 are typically kept in digits.
  • I think letters works in this instance as we are talking about a general more than twenty-five years, rather than a exact number of years.

Poetry

• What is "left-leaning"?
  • "sympathetic to or tending towards the left in politics." The same word is used by the source to describe The Age
• Can Christianity, Jew be wikilinked?
  • Not sure. I would probably consider that to be overlinking.
• Duplink: Isaac Rosenberg
  • Might be worth linking twice, as there is som distance between the two mentions?
• Some of his works also appeared in journals and in anthologies such as the 1953 Faber Book of Twentieth Century Verse. Source?
  • Fixed
• Little scholarly attention have been "has been"?
  • Fixed
• Who are Jacobs and Baker? Have they been introduced anywhere by their full names?
  • Introduced earlier in the section by full name.

That should be all. A bit busy now, I think I will be able to get to this only by the end of this week. Cheers! Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 18:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you very much for reviewing. I will try to adress all points. Cheers –P. S. Burton (talk) 01:46, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi, found time for this today. Excellent, all issues resolved. I am happy to promote this. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 05:59, 28 March 2016 (UTC)