Talk:Lazarus (Travie McCoy album)/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 20:17, 9 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

General notes

Lead

01. "Lazarus is the debut album by Gym Class Heroes frontman Travie McCoy" - do you mean "lead singer"? Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. "Upon the album's release, Lazarus debuted at number 25 on the U.S. Billboard 200 chart with sales of 15,000 copies" - Number 25 needs to be spelled out completely (number twenty-five) per WP:ORDINAL. And link Billboard 200 and not just Billboard. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
03. Link Billboard Hot 100. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
04. Wasn't Billionaire a lead single? Comment: Yes indeed. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:55, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
05. "The songs "Need You" and "We'll Be Alright" have also been released as singles." - promotional singles or promotional recordings?

Comment: I am not sure what the difference is, the two links redirect to the same page. What do you mean? Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

06. "positive to mixed" to "mixed to positive" Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
07. Per WP:Lead which states "The lead serves both as an introduction to the article and as a summary of its most important aspects". Please consider adding the major aspects of the article.

Secondary notes

Lead

Number four hasn't been addressed. I am pretty sure it was the lead single (especially if it was the first single released). Number five; I see where you are coming from. What I meant was, were these promotional singles or just singles? (there is a difference).

Comment: I think that they were just singles, as they were released several months after the release of the album and they were not released to create a buzz for the album. Is that okay? Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Background

01. "while Gym Class was on the road promoting its 2008 album The Quilt." - remove "its 2008 album" and add the year of release to The Quilt in (parenthesis). Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. 808s & Heartbreak - year of release should also be in (parenthesis) Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Recording and production

01. "1994 debut album Southernplayalisticadillacmuzik." - per above, remove "1994" and replace it in (parenthesis) Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Music

01. "Speaking of the album, McCoy stated" - sounds a bit ORISH to me. Would wanna consider revising, so it doesn't sound like you are in an interview. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. "The album's opener" ---> "The album's opening track" Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
03. Ahhha! so Billionaire was the lead single. You would want to include that in the lead per WP:Lead. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lyrics

01. "escapism" - wiktionary this ---> escapism Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. "nostalgic" - wiktionary this as well ---> nostalgic Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Packaging and title

01. The album artwork ---> The album's artwork Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

01. "He plans to tour extensively to promote the album in order to" - this sentence needs to be written in past-tense tone. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

01. "Billboard Hot 100 at 92" - link Billboard Hot 100 and spell out completely "at number ninety-two" per WP:ORDINAL. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. "number 25" - needs to be spelled out "number twenty-five" Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
03. "peaking at number 25" - per above. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
04. "number 11 on the Billboard Digital Albums charts" - spell out the number --> "number eleven" Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
05. "at number 69, its peak position thus far" - consider rewording and peaked at number sixty-nine. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
06. "reaching a peak of 4" - consider rewording peaked at number-four Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
07. "The song was listed number 6" - consider rewording The song was positioned at number-six Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
08. "and peaked at number 36" - spell the number out completely ---> "number thirty-six" Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

01. "generally positive to mixed" - consider rewording generally mixed to positive. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
02. The Papercut Chronicles - needs the year of release in (parenthesis) Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

01. Needs references. Done. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Final notes

This article needs a bit of help. I am going to put it On hold for further development, up to seven (7) days. Please address the concerns that were stated. Take care and good luck, AJona1992 (talk) 16:30, 11 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your suggestions! I believe I have addressed everything. Please let me know if there is anything else I should do. Basilisk4u (talk) 02:49, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your fast response! I'm currently going to re-read the article to make sure that everything has been taking care of, AJona1992 (talk) 03:09, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

01. "number 11 on the Billboard Digital Albums charts" - number 11 needs to be spelled out ---> number eleven.

This is the only concern. Just fix this and the article passes, AJona1992 (talk) 03:24, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done :D Basilisk4u (talk) 03:28, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Passed the article. Congrats! AJona1992 (talk) 03:31, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome! Thanks so much :) Basilisk4u (talk) 01:00, 13 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]