Talk:Lauren Jackson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:43, 7 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Overall summary

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:
It is well referenced.

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
Yes, well referenced.

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

This is a great article with loads of references and verified sources. It is well written and could pass GA very easily and quickly if these following minor issues were addressed (they're mainly copy editing stuff). I'll be out in a bit so I will leave some comments later...

I've also noticed that you are going to be away for some time. I will therefore still review this GAN, but will put it on hold till 13 August or later, or whenever you can come to this review! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:43, 7 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will be handling the task of correcting the article in response to your comments. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:28, 8 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thank you! I will leave the comments now. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:42, 8 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

As I said, this is a great article so this GA review could pass very quickly if these minor issues were addressed.

Personal

I can't help but think that some parts of this section are not very encyclopedia-like. A few minor changes can help improve this:
"Gary played for the Boomers in 1975. He is very tall, and Jackson inherited his height" - confusing sentence. 'Jackson' is referring to Lauren, isn't it?
- Y Always a problem in the opening paragraph of biographies. Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:58, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Maree played for the Opals from 1974 to 1982." - could both Gary and Maree be both referred to as Lauren's father and mother respectively?
- Y Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:58, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Celebrity

"Jackson has googled herself. When people google her, some of the first search results feature Jackson in the nude" - could this sentence be a little more formal? Something about this just doesn't read right...
- Y Dropped the first sentence. Re-worked the second slightly. Also ran a google search. Glad to report the nudie pix still appear. :) Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:03, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yes I'm glad too! I think I might have checked that before the GA review! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 14:51, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

European basketball

The image in this section needs a caption.
- Y Added caption. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:03, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Honours

"In late 2011, the Albury Sports Stadium was renamed after her." - could this sentence explain where this statium is and what it was renamed to?
- Y It's in her home town of Albury. Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:29, 10 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I read one of the refs and it said that Jackson opened the Lauren Jackson Sports Centre. Just wondering is this connected with the Albury Sports Stadium?
- Y Yes, they are one and the same. Re-worded to make this clear. Unfortunately, the article on the Lauren Jackson Sports Centre is a red link. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:29, 10 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

On hold

This is a very popular article that gains around 80,000 views a month! And especially when the Olympics are on just literally thirty miles away from me, there is much to applaud in this article as given the time and events link together very well. This article is written excellently, and once those very minor issues are addressed, this article could easily be rewarded its well deserved GA status! Very well done on the extra work. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 15:01, 9 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

We'll be over there in a couple of weeks to cover the Paralympics. Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:33, 10 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Close - promoted

There was really little work to do with this article to bring it up to GA, and together with the effort made by Hawkeye and LauraHale this article has speedily made it to GA. This has in fact been the best article I have ever reviewed; so many correct sources with excellent prose there was hardly any comments to be made! This is very impressive!

Enough talk then - this article has deserves its GA status once and for all. Well done! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 20:18, 10 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]