Talk:Latino college preparatory academy
Proposed improvements
[edit]Rather than engage in an edit war, I suggest working out changes on Talk, then putting an agreed set live.
- "The school wins praise for its free, home-cooked Mexican meals" - who praises the meals? Is there a source? 'Features' is much weaker, but verifiable.
- "Recently released" - is this academic year 2005-6?
- "The school's current senior class - which includes several extremely succesful students - and the school's sophomore class doubled their English language proficiency, beating state and county averages." - Current as of 2006-7? Doubled from what to what? Which test is being used, this provides context. 'Extremely successful' also depends on context - other editors may wish to remove it.
- "Several of the students who started that newspaper have now taken over the school yearbook," - 'Taken over' can be a loaded word, suggesting they don't have everyone's support. May prefer 'also run' or 'have moved on to'.
- "the Multimedia department is preparing podcasts, webpages and a larger drive into a publications empire." - May we remove this until the work is available for public consumption, when it can be linked in?
- "The 100 percent pass rate - the highest in the country" - Tautology - it's not possible to have a pass rate above 100%.
- "90 percent of the students actually aced the exam." - Please define 'aced', preferably with a link to another Wiki article.
- "Current students are finishing applications to multiple Ivy League schools, as well as the UC system and Stanford University." - Is it true and documented that previous students have been accepted in Ivy League / UCal / Stanford? It would be preferable to re-cast this in the past tense, so that people don't have to update every year.
Absent a response from other editors, I propose to make these changes on 30 September. A message has been left with User:Ericlee219, a lead editor. Eludium-q36 08:49, 23 September 2006 (UTC)
- You should also merge the content to Latino College Preparatory Academy, which is properly capitalized. -- Scientizzle 17:49, 23 September 2006 (UTC)