Talk:Last Dance (Dua Lipa song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:54, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Giving a review very quickly after nomination by taking this one on! --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:54, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Put (deluxe edition) in brackets after the album's title in the infobox
• Add streaming next to Digital download with the appropriate target
• Target Stephen Kozmeniuk to Koz (record producer)
• "Dua Lipa, included on the deluxe edition of her 2017 eponymous debut studio album." → "Dua Lipa from the deluxe edition of her eponymous debut studio album (2017)."
• "and it's producer" → "and its producer"
• Remove the about part of the sentence from here; I will set it for a different area of the lead below
• "was released for digital download on 9 February 2016 through Lipa's independent record label," → "was released for digital download and streaming on 9 February 2016 through" with the appropriate target
• "after premiering on" → "after having premiered on"
• ""Last Dance" is a" → "It is a"
• "song with a" → "song that features a"
• Next sentence should be "Lyrically, the song is about..." with mention of its lyrical meaning
• "received critical acclaim from" → "received acclaim from"
• "peaked at number 4" → "peaked at number four" per MOS:NUM
• "It received a music video that premiered on" → "An accompanying music video premiered via"
• "by Jon Brewer and Ian Blair and" → "by both Jon Brewer and Ian Blair, and was"
• Remove wikilink on California
• "and she promoted the single with numerous live performances," → "and was promoted by her with numerous live performances in 2016,"

 Done

Background and composition

• "and Stephen Kozmeniuk, with the latter of the three also handling the" → "and Koz, with the latter of the three solely handling" with the target
• "They wrote it in" → "They wrote the song in"
• "in Toronto after Lipa" → "in Toronto, after Lipa"
• Are you sure "success" is the correct term here? Gives the impression it had already been released by 2014; also, add the song's release year in brackets.

• Changed to "sound"

• "writing session of the day and she" → "writing session in a day and Lipa"
• "how she was able to capture" → "being able to capture"
• "she recalls that moment." → "Lipa recalls that moment."
• "but after hearing the finished" → "though after hearing the finished"
• "She stated that it → "Lipa stated that it"
• "she would take it to producers" → "she would take to producers"
• Add timedtext to the sample
• Wikilink pre-chorus to itself on the audio sample main text per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "It begins slowly with Lipa" → "The track begins slowly, with Lipa"
• "The track builds up to" → "It builds up to"
• "is mostly instrumental, with" → "is mostly instrumental, featuring"
• "It has a" → "The track has a"

 Done

Release and promotion

• "on 8 February 2016 on" → "on 8 February 2016 via"
• "was released for digital download" → "was released for digital download and streaming" with the target
• "Dua Lipa Limited as the third single" → "Dua Lipa Limited, as the third single" with the target
• Remove target on eponymous debut studio album
• "in the United Kingdom" → "stations in the United Kingdom"
• "It also received remixes" → ""Last Dance" also received remixes"
• "on Lipa's eponymous debut studio album, but" → "on the album but"
• Move the img to being at the top of the music video sub-section instead
• "with Jaguar titled" → "with [[Jaguar Cars|Jaguar], titled"
• Are you sure punctuation should be inside quotes for the title?

• Put outside quote.

• "at the Eurosonic festival for that year" → "at the Eurosonic festival"
• "on the set list Lipa's" → "on the set list for Lipa's"
• Add the tour's year in brackets
• Mention what year the MTV performance was
• "the song during her MTV Setlist show" → "the song for her MTV Setlist show"

 Done

Music video

• "by Jon Brewer and Ian Blair and" → "by Jon Brewer alongside Ian Blair, while"
• "It premiered on" → "It premiered to YouTube on"
• "was filmed in December 2015" → "was filmed during December 2015"
• "of California. Lipa recalled that" → "of California, with Lipa recalling that"
• "really cold there" → "really cold in the state"
• "The video opens with Lipa" → "It opens with Lipa"
• "she is seen wearing a black bra with" → "Lipa is seen wearing a black bra and"
• "At times, the visuals" → "At multiple points, the visuals"
• Target 3D to an appropriate page
• "looped fragment as well as" → "looped fragment, as well as"
• "as a nod to her" → "for nodding to her"

 Done

Reception

• "received critical acclaim from" → "was met with acclaim from"
• "Lipa's vocal flexibility writing her" → "Lipa's vocal flexibility, writing her"
• "For Pulse Media, Jessica Boyle" → "Writing for Pulse Media, Jessica Boyle"
• "categorize the lyrics as "standalone"" → "categorized the lyrics as "standalone,""
• Remove target on club
• "the song's production and lyric mix as well as" → "the song's production and lyrics mix, while"
• "called it a" → "called "Last Dance" a"
• "to Justin Bieber's Purpose and" → "to Justin Bieber's Purpose (2015), and"
• "compared the song to" → "compared the song to the music of"
• Remove second wikilink on Major Lazer
• Target The 405 to The 405 (magazine)
• "and "infectious" with" → "and "infectious," with"
• "on Billboard's Twitter Emerging Artists chart, where it spent seven weeks." → "on the US Billboard Twitter Emerging Artists chart, lasting for seven weeks on the chart."

 Done

Track listings

• Digital download → Digital download / streaming
• Digital download – Remixes → Digital download / streaming – Remixes

 Done

Credits and personnel

• Recording and Personnel should be separated with subheadings, not subsections
• Target Metropolis Studios to Metropolis Group
• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

 Done

Release history

• Add streaming for both of the digital download releases

 Done

References

• Top job with the archiving!
• Copyvio score looks amazing at 7.4%!!
• MOS:QWQ issues with ref 3
• Cite numerous countries iTunes for ref 13 to verify the release was indeed various and change iTunes to iTunes Store
• Ditto for ref 15, with no wikilinks though
• Would it better to cite a release source, like AllMusic for example, on ref 16? Maybe 17 too if there is another...?

•  Not done, for 16 it's an archived source that has its original pre-order track listing and 17, the AllMusic source isn't accurate.

• Add language for ref 21
• Target The 405 to The 405 (magazine) on ref 29

 Done

Final comments and verdict

• There appears to have been some reverting of edits, but it was not close together so I do believe the article is stable and am placing it  On hold, good luck! --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:22, 22 July 2020 (UTC)

• Thanks Kyle Peake, I have addressed all your comments. LOVI33 23:13, 22 July 2020 (UTC)

• LOVI33 Thanks for the quick response, did some brief copy editing but ✓ Pass now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:15, 23 July 2020 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.