Talk:Lasioglossum figueresi

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Raymundo.marcelo. Peer reviewers: Liz.yucknut, Kevin.george1.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 23:56, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Writing edits

I removed some comma splices in the female description section. I changed "nest" to "nests" in the habitat section. In the colony cycle section: I changed "for" to "in the event of" to make the sentence flow better since for was used before."Less creation of nests" to "fewer nests are created." "Yet don't" to "but they do not." In mating behavior: Removed "when flying around."

Comments and Revisions

Overall, this article is very informative and well organized. However, many sentence revisions need to be made. There were several areas in this entry where I made sentence revisions. In the Taxonomy, Females, Male, Distribution, Colony, Mating Behavior, Learning, and Parasite sections, I rearranged some sentences for ease of flow. In both the Males and Females sections, the words "yellowish" and "blackish" were used, which I changed to more appropriate adjectives. I also took the time out to look for a picture, but unfortunately couldn't find any. The Female section needs a lot of sentence revisions. There are many anatomical words that need to be described, and a lot of the sentences need to be broken up into multiple sentences. In the Development and Reproduction section, I thought it would make more sense to have the Sexual Attraction subsection come before the Mating subsection. Therefore I moved the Sexual Attraction subsection up. In the Parasite section, I italicized some species names that weren't italicized before. But in general, beyond these grammatical errors, it looks likes you're off to a good start! Liz.yucknut (talk) 11:11, 29 September 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review

Overall, I thought the article was well written and detailed. I like that you included the information about the females dying before their larvae hatch in the introduction as it was interesting and made me want to read more. There were a few sections that were too dense with content however, and I think breaking down the scientific jargon into more laymen terms would help the reader; in particular, the description and identification section could use some rewording.

I edited several aspects of the article, including spelling and grammar, organization and structure, and content. I added a picture of the range of where the species are commonly found from Discover Life, but I was unable to find a picture of the species.

In terms of spelling and grammar, this article was fairly polished. It has clearly been read through before, so there weren’t too many corrections to be made. I did change the sentence structure and phrasing around in a couple of places. I made some small changes such as changing the word “with” to “and” in second sentence of the Females subsection of the description and identification section.

Structurally, I added the name of the guy who discovered the species and the year of discovery in parenthesis right after the first mention of the species. Several of the hyperlinks were red, meaning they didn’t actually link to another Wikipedia page for a few reasons. First would be that there wasn’t a Wikipedia page in existence that covered that specific term or topic. In this case, I deleted the hyperlink aspect. Second, the topic that the word or phrase was supposed to link to may have been named something else entirely, and in these cases I appropriately fixed the hyperlink. I also added some hyperlinks to other words, such as the name of the genus in the taxonomy section, etc. in order to help the reader find more information on these topics should they desire. Kevin.george1 (talk) 04:13, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 4

For the introduction, I think the synonym would do better in the taxobox. The introduction needs to be cleaned up to flow more smoothly. As it stands, each sentence is its own thing. It would also be good to include a picture and a map of its geographical distribution.

You need better organization within sections. For example, the female and male sections should be divided into smaller paragraphs. Also, the paragaph on Parasites needs to be better organized. As with your introduction, you jump from one thought to the next. There are no smooth transitions.

I made some changes in wording, but this article will need more than the minor edits I made. Also, I don't understand why you have introductory paragraphs for sections such as Interactions with other Species. It's repetitive and does not add anything to your article. Xerylium (talk) 03:15, 5 December 2015 (UTC)