Talk:Large Japanese field mouse
Your revisions and additions are very clear and concise! It might be helpful to expand a little more on the concept of mast seeding and how exactly it can have these implications on certain populations of mice. Can we assume that the readers know what evolutionary adaptive is - do you think you need to explain the basics, "allowing the mice to deal with or avoid tannin consumption and thus live longer to propagate the adaptations to future generations"? I changed a bit of wording to clear up a few ideas that I believed you wanted to get across - such as avoiding predators at night instead of deal with predation at night. Other than that I think you're on your way to a great final draft.
Thanks for your revisions, BlueBioBill. I definitely agree that the evolutionary explanation seems a bit unnecessary, I removed it but kept a brief note on what makes them adaptive.
R-NH2 (talk) 06:38, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
Hello R-NH2,
I've revised some of your contributions to Foraging Behavior to be a bit more concise and neutral. Your contributions provide insightful and relevant information to A. speciosus, and are organized well into their subsections. They are also well referenced. I think from this point you can proceed on to explaining how the foraging behavior you contributed relates to the evolutionary background of the species.
Anon2831 (talk) 17:34, 25 October 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for your feedback, Anon2831! Your revisions were useful and I added more specific evolutionary findings like you suggested.
R-NH2 (talk) 01:17, 9 November 2015 (UTC)
Hey R-NH2,
I edited only a few sentences regarding wording and grammar. Overall, it was an interesting and educational article. As the reader, it was easy to follow and understand. I checked your sources and you did a good job of covering the material and summarizing the important information of the articles. For further continuation on this topic possibly expand more on the idea of "trial-and-error" in relation to evolution.
Biliken 1995 (talk) 18:37, 25 October 2015 (UTC)
Thanks, Biliken 1995! I seemed to gloss over some grammar issues so I'm glad you took care of it. I appreciate your feedback and I added a little more on the "trial-and-error" idea and how that can vary between populations. Props on the original username by the way.
R-NH2 (talk) 01:17, 9 November 2015 (UTC)
Your article was really good at summarizing the information in a concise and understandable way. There were just a few things that I noted:
You wrote, "This makes them effective seed dispersers" in your first paragraph, but does this have any significance to their foraging behavior. If so, you should expand on that in another sentence. If not, then you may not need it in your article.
Under your 'Effects of Light' section, you wrote, "These behavioral changes are thought to be an adaptation to help the mice deal with predation at night." This was a bit confusing to me because you said they were more likely to be out in the open at night, rather than the day. Wouldn't that make them MORE susceptible to predation at night? When you say "deal with predation at night," it sounds like there are more predators in the darker hours. Maybe you should rephrase this or clarify that there are fewer predators at night (if this is true), which is why they would prefer to leave their nests at night.
Under tannin selection, you talked about acclimating to high levels of tannin and, alternatively, having a foraging preference for acorns with lower levels of tannin, but you said that Apodemus speciosus did both. Did you mean to be talking about A. argenteus and Apodemus speciosus, or just Apodemus speciosus?
Other than these few minor details I noticed, I think you did a very good job on this article! Biol3010 evo bsp (talk) 14:42, 16 November 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for your close reading, Biol3010. I could definitely see how those details could be confusing; I clarified some of the details for both of those cases. Regarding their role as seed dispersers, I agree that it doesn't add too much but I felt like it was fair to keep in that relevant detail as it doesn't quite merit it's own section and is just a fact to note. Thanks for the help.
R-NH2 (talk) 06:38, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
Hello! I am a Junior undergraduate at Saint Louis University and I am doing secondary research on foraging behavior in Apodemus speciosus. I will be contributing to this article over the next few months. Here are some citations for preliminary research:
Please let me know if you have any comments or suggestions! — Preceding unsigned comment added by R-NH2 (talk • contribs) 19:59, 21 September 2015 (UTC)
so cute — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dolnoc (talk • contribs) 11:49, 1 February 2021 (UTC)