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Robert McClenon (talk) 22:45, 21 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
There are four references in the lead yet not all of the lead is referenced. Those items being referenced are not particularly controversial so they can be cited in the main body of the article where each of these facts should be expanded upon.
"composition and modern dance" could link both, or at least "composition" which is jargon.
"then husband" normally hyphenated.
Is there a link for Chevalier medal?
"on September 14th 1921" -> "on September 14, 1921,"
"Grew up in a" Perhaps "Growing up" if you want to start the sentence like this.
"American missionary school" link?
"they got married" they were married.
"Hangzhou School of art" should art be capitalised here?
"Rue du Moulin-Vert District 14 Paris" is this really "Rue du Moulin-Vert in the 14th arrondissement of Paris"?
"Modern dancer" no need for capital M.
"received the Graham Technique training" perhaps "received training in the Graham technique ..."
"A dear friend" not encyclopedic in tone.
"Lalan later entered the Conservatoire..." onwards is all unreferenced.
"and the Lyrical Abstraction at the time" this reads odd. maybe just "and lyrical abstraction"?
"her unique voice in the Integrated art" serious tone issues.
"through Lyrical Abstraction" no need for capitals.
"improvisational way of creating" what does this mean?
"canvases are larger than life" tone.
"dark and meditative" according to whom?
"mid 1965s" what? what does that mean?
"One of her three paneled painting" three-paneled. And paintings.
"innovative and introspective dance was the last dance of Lalan" tone.
"She died in an car accident a week after.[10]" date?
And it's not "an car".
Solo exhibitions, chronological order.
I would use colons after the year, not commas (and you've missed one in any case).
References need tidying up, no SHOUTING, access-dates or publication dates. Publisher/website information should be there for all of them too.
