Talk:La Tierra del Olvido (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:41, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Even though your other GAN's review has still not been wrapped up, I will take this on because it is only small and stands as the oldest songs GAN. --K. Peake 16:41, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Normally refs in the infobox are an issue, but the ones here are acceptable since the cover art is illustrated in the infobox and a credits/personnel section does not need to be added when there's only studios plus two songwriters, one of which served as half of the producers
Criteria Recording , Miami FL → Criteria Recording, Miami FL
neo-vallenato → Neo-vallenato
"is a song from Colombian singer Carlos Vives's seventh" → "is a song by Colombian singer Carlos Vives from his seventh"
Target to La Tierra del Olvido should only be on "of the same name" and add release year of the album in brackets
"It is a neo-vallenato song that utilizes" → "The song is a neo-vallenato number that utilizes" to avoid usage of "it" and "number" is not different from the original language
Target folk guitar to Steel-string acoustic guitar
"accordion, in which the artist longs" → "accordion, on which Vives longs"
Three reviews is not really enough for a critical overview; are you sure at least one other can't be added?
Target music critics to Music journalism
"mostly being found one of the album's catchies tunes" → "mostly being found as one of the album's catchiest tunes"
"of the ASCAP Latin Award in 1996." → "at the ASCAP Latin Awards in 1996."
Mention info about the video synopsis in the lead
"and was nominated" → "and was nominated for"
"20 years later, Vives re-recorded the track with" → "In 2015, Vives re-recorded "La Tierra del Olvido" with" because otherwise it sounds like the release year was 2016
"and was also nominated" → "and further received a nomination for"

Background and composition

"Carlos Vives released Clasicos de la Provincia," → "Vives released his sixth studio album Clásicos de la Provincia,"
"the genre which helped revitalized its" → "the genre, which helped revitalize its"
"for Vives's next project." → "for Vives' next project."
"was La Tierra del Olvido which" → "was La Tierra del Olvido, which"
Target contemporary music to Contemporary classical music
"our local connection."" → "our local connection"." per MOS:QUOTE
The first three sentences should be swapped with the two after them, as comp comes before lyrics
"On her book," → "In her book"
"noted when read" → "noted that when read"
Before Los Angeles Times, "the" should not start with capitalisation
Move the lead single sentence to a relevant area instead of being after the comp; maybe directly after the current background or in promotion?

Promotion and reception

"for the "La Tierra del Olvido" was" → "for "La Tierra del Olvido" was"
You should mention the "love story" part from La Mezcla too, as then you can have synopsis info to add to the lead, plus maybe some more from this source can be added?
"it was nominated" → "it was nominated for"
"Premios Nuestro Tierra award ceremony where he collaborated with" → "Premios Nuestro Tierra awards ceremony, where he performed an interpretation of the song with" with the target
"for the album" → "for Vives' album"
"complimented it as" → "complimented the song as"
"as the album's" → "as La Tierra del Olvido's" to be specific due to another album being mentioned more recently
"listed it as" → "listed the latter of the two as"
"at number five and eight" → "at numbers five and eight"

Other versions

Create this section by splitting the bottom para from the promotion and reception section because two paras is fine and this doesn't fit currently being after the reception para
"20 years later, Vives" → "20 years after the original's release, Vives"
Wikilink Maluma to himself instead
"This version was included" → "The version was included"
Wikilink bonus track per MOS:LINK2SECT
"Its music video for 2015 version" → "The music video for the song's 2015 version"
The locations are often listed out by the Billboard ref, which you can add here, alongside the 2 million views in two days statistic. Information from La Mezcla such as post-production supervisor and colorist can be added too.
"and was also nominated" → "and was also nominated for"

Charts

Good

References

Copyvio score looks pretty good at 23.1%!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Wikilink Pantheon Books on ref 1
Wikilink AllMusic on ref 2
Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 5
Target El Tiempo to El Tiempo (Colombia) on ref 6
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 7
Wikilink New York University Press on ref 8
Wikilink Los Angeles Times on ref 9
Remove Univision from ref 13
Target La Mega to WSKQ-FM on ref 14
Cite El Heraldo as work/website instead for ref 22 and target to El Heraldo (Colombia), plus add language parameter

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; a short review, especially compared to Vuelve! --K. Peake 19:46, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Was going to do it today, but there's an incentive for deliveries that I'm taking, so I'm doing this tomorrow and Wednesday. Erick (talk) 16:47, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Magiciandude: That is refreshing to hear since I was getting a bit dubious because of this article being on hold for so long; you having everything wrapped up by Wednesday is ideal for me to be honest, as I have an ear syringing appointment tomorrow. --K. Peake 16:49, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Aannnd done! Sorry again for the long wait, that last GAR really got me burned out. I hope everything turned out fine for the appointment! Erick (talk) 15:40, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Magiciandude: Wow that did take a while and it's understandable after that massive article, plus I had microsuction done to get rid of my excess wax! ✓ Pass now, there was an issue you inadvertently caused grammatically in the lead but I fixed it. --K. Peake 16:03, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]