Talk:LARES/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:45, 15 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall this is a pretty good article, though I have the following concerns:

Ref #12 (San Francisco Classical Voice. Scott MacClelland. July 15, 2007. In Praise of Sandor Salgo) is a deadlink.
I think moving the anagram mention early on into the lead would be better.
"In 2008, LARES was reorganized into E-coustic Systems, offering the familiar LARES products alongside new conference room and sound reinforcement systems." It makes it sound like they were merged into the latter, but this doesn't seem to be the case. I'm a bit unsure as to what's implied here.
"Tens of thousands of concert-goers, for the first time, did not criticize the music as being spoiled by amplification." Cite needed, or maybe find a cite on previous criticism.
"Our feeling is that people have a prejudice against this kind of thing; they think that to use such a system is kind of faking it. We really don't think that's true." Mark London, director of capital projects was reported as saying "The system has added an amazing amount of warmth to the orchestra and significantly altered the acoustics of the hall."" Quotes need cites.
"In 2003, Steve Barbar was asked to return to a LARES installation he had just left, the Sunset Center in Carmel, California, as its new acoustic signature was perceived as being too long and too detailed." Did he leave the center? I'm confused as to this sentence's meaning, and while the rest of the paragraph makes some sense, it doesn't fix this part.
E-coustic systems section is uncited.
"Lexicon continues to benefit from its initial LARES research and development. Lexicon currently offers a scaled-down and simplified microprocessor controller, the MC-12, intended for auditory enhancement within home and professional listening spaces. The system is called Lexicon LIVE." POv and I'm not sure what it has to do with LARES.
The overall tone of this article feels somewhat promotional. "had become respected for", "Lexicon continues to benefit from its initial LARES research and development", etc. Go over the article again and fix any tone issues.

I'll put this on hold for five days and re-read it to see if it is GA-worthy. I might get a second opinion on the language used though. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:45, 15 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

No progress has been made on the article, nor is there a rationale for the lack thereof, so as a result I'm failing the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:45, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review, and I'm sorry I didn't participate. I was busy with other articles, and put this one on the back burner too long. When I get the chance, I will carefully consider your suggestions and implement them. Binksternet (talk) 18:45, 30 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]