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Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 09:36, 2 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. So it begins.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 09:36, 2 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • "As the next arcs which primarily relied on action much to Togashi's pressure, Kurama became a prominent fighter". I would suggest rewriting the sentence with more commas, different consecutio temporum and more clearly. Something like (don't take it literally): "As the next arcs, which primarily relieve on action, Kurama became a prominent fighter much to Togashi's pressure".
  • I would add a summary of Reception in the incipit.
  • ""the typical "desu ne (ですね)"". Inverted commas are missing. It should be italicised for Japanese. In the nihongo template, the translation is missing.
  • ""Youko Minamino"". Why the inverted commas? This does not seem to be the guideline. Also, I would add a wlink. Even if the article isn't there, it's not a problem.

"There were other surname candidates such as the Japanese celebrities Minamida, Ishino and Gushiken whose first names are also Youko".

  • "There were other surname candidates such as the Japanese celebrities Minamida, Ishino and Gushiken whose first names are also Youko". I would add a few commas, such as ", such as" and ", whose first name".
  • "and considers Hiei to be her favorite". It is stricly necessary?

@Tintor2: Good work.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:24, 3 March 2023 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Revised the notes. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 22:16, 3 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • How come Human World is capitalised? Are we sure this is correct?
    • They call it Human World but revise.
  • I would present Hei, Goki and especially the tree Underwolrd treasures better. Also 'two guys called', 'jewels called', or similar things would be enough.
  • There is a parenthesis at the end of the paragraph, but I would put the anime issue in a separate sentence.
  • Present other subjects better too. For example 'of the entities called Four Beasts'.
  • I would move the comment on Kishimoto to the end of the paragraph.
  • Designer Mari Kitayama's comment seems superfluous to me.

@Tintor2: That's all. Forgive me if I am always a little slow.TeenAngels1234 (talk) 11:04, 5 March 2023 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Revised everythingTintor2 (talk) 13:45, 5 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, then. Good prose. Article clear to me, and I have never seen the anime. Short, but comprehensive enough. Excellent sources in line with the WProject Anime guides. Passing.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:07, 5 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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