Talk:Kripa/GA1

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 10:01, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Chiswick Chap: Sorry for my late reply as I was not aware of this, I will fix these..245CMR.•^👥📜 10:24, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

This is a very nice first GAN and I will have only a few minor comments to make.

The source "Ganguli" should have a date (even if it's just "2021") and be linked where it's cited.

✓ Done, added 1896 (publishing date of the last volume of the book), .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:39, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Please also link Wilson 1840 where it's used.

✓ Done, .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:39, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Devas links to a disambiguation page; please choose the right target for it from the list on that page.

✓ Fixed, linked to Deva (Hinduism), .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:39, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

How does "Gautama" mean "Descendant of Gautama"? ... sounds Recursive to me ...

I have added this because of the source. (As far as I know, in olden days people dont used to have surnames and instead used their "famous" ancestor's name for identification. Therefore, Gautama can be understood as a surname.), .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:39, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Seems that we use italics for Manvantara. Maybe also gloss it as "period" or something like that.

Done, added "which is a cyclic period of time in Hindu cosmology". .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:51, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kali Yuga needs a brief gloss, something like "the last age".

Done, added "the last of the four yugas (ages)". .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:51, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I know it's difficult but it would help the reader if you gave approximate dates or date ranges for the cited documents. For the Vishnu Purana, for instance, you could say "written before 1000 CE" or something like that.

Added " (c. 400 BCE - 900 CE) for Vishnu Purana. I have added " (c. 700 BCE - 400 CE) " for Mahabharata in the Name section.

It would also help if you'd note when a document like the Stri Parva is actually a part of the Mahabharata, the first time you mention it. There are several instances.

Added "of the Mahabharata". In some places "of the epic" is used to avoid excessive usage, .245CMR.•^👥📜 10:54, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I know what wayang kulit is but this'll be obscure for many readers. The caption should briefly gloss "Javanese shadow puppet theatre" or something similar. It'll also be surprising to readers that this is Indonesian not Indian, so again a brief explanation ("the formerly Hindu...") would be useful.

Changed to "A Javanese shadow puppet of Kripa". Is mentioning "Hindu" necessary as it would be strange for readers?

Thanks, and yes I'd say it was necessary, especially if as you suggest it adds to readers' understanding. You might wikilink to Hinduism in Java (piped to "|Hindu") so people can click on it if curious.

@Chiswick Chap: Ok, I have added this "A Javanese shadow puppet of Kripa from Indonesia, whose culture has been greatly influenced by Hinduism.".

Good work! It's a GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:23, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Chiswick Chap: Thank you very much for your help. I will remain grateful. Can you please suggest something for DYK. For eg. should I nominate about his birth or his immortal status or his survival of the war. .245CMR.•^👥📜 13:25, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I couldn't possibly comment. Choose whatever seems most distinctive and is clearly cited; the DYK team will lend a hand. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:29, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Chiswick Chap: Ok, your advice is valuable. Hope that we will meet for more articles in future..245CMR.•^👥📜 13:33, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]