Talk:Kojo Aidoo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:35, 5 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this. MWright96 (talk) 17:35, 5 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

High school career

Wikilink Loyola High School
I know what MVP means, but spell it out in full for non-sports experts

College career

Spell out the CIAU's full name and place the acronym in parentheses in the first mention
Same for OUA
"Aidoo described the 26–7 lost against the Manitoba Bisons as" - loss
"McMaster athletic hall of fame" - The first letters of each remaining word should be captialized
"CIAU offensive player of the week" - ditto

Professional career

The CFL should be spelt out in full and the acroynms in parentheses
Wikilink 2003 CFL draft and Edmonton Eskimos

Winnipeg Blue Bombers

"Aidoo was signed by the Winnipeg Blue Bombers in October 2013" - don't you mean October 2003?
Who is Tom Europe?

Hamilton Tiger-Cats

Link Ottawa Citizen and Hamilton Spectator and italize both since they are newspapers
"newcomer Les Mullings competed with Aidoo to become backup running backup." - I don't understand the text I've bolded. Please clarify.
"Head coach Greg Marshall was released prior to the 2007 season after two disappointing seasons," - repititon of the word seasons

References

No dead links due to all sources being offline

On hold until issues are resolved. MWright96 (talk) 07:06, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've done a lot of what needed to be done, however the only mentions I could find of the Hamliton Spectator were in the references. CrashUnderride 07:36, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All points have been actioned and I can happily promote this to GA. MWright96 (talk) 16:39, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Just as a note @Crash Underride: Apparently, The Hamilton Spectator usually provides their name with the "The" included. ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 17:07, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Also, please fix these: Help:CS1 errors#accessdate missing url. Print source cites don't need and should not use an access-date. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 17:25, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Finnusertop: I haven't accessed them as print sources; I accessed them through an online database, but if I were to provide a URL, it wouldn't work for anyone but the students at my university. Should I still remove the access dates? ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 17:27, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I see, I've ran into that problem sometime as well. I'd rather not include the access-dates without urls since it produces that cs1 error. Per Template:Cite web/doc you could say these are stable sources so an access-date is not needed. The other option that comes to mind is to link to the main page of the online database you have used and keep the access-dates. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 17:33, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I can't believe when it Ctrl + F to find The Hamilton Spectator it didn't show up. Hmm...well, I'm glad to have helped. CrashUnderride 21:31, 6 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]