Talk:Koda Kumi/GA1

GA Review

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As requested by Moon-sunrise, I will review the article. I'll start with citations, then move on to prose, and then do MoS-related stuff. Any comments are much welcome! Ink Runner (talk) 19:05, 6 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Update: The article is looking pretty good now, I personally think it's ready to become a GA, but I'll wait one more day in case Dasani had any other concerns. Ink Runner (talk) 05:35, 18 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Citations and reference issues
- All chart positions need citations. - Add.
- In the "Early career" section, it says "Top Twenty hits". "Hits" might be considered POV, so could you find a source that describes the singles as "hits"? - Changed to singles.
- Citation 14 is a broken link - Changed citation.
- Is there a source that calls Koda's twelve singles the "12 Single: Collection"? - Couldn't find any sources that calls the project the "12 Single: Collection" but there are sources (Oricon) that say "12 Singles" or "12 Consecutive Singles". Would it be better if I just changed it from "12 Single: Collection" to "12 Single Project"? Changed to project.
- "At the end of the year Koda released two more single, "Chase" and "Kiseki", continuing the ero-kakkoii style." Is there a citation that says that these singles were ero-kakkoii? - ~~The music videos of both singles show that she continued the style.~~ I removed it. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 20:00, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "nine of which were limited to 50,000 copies" This needs a citation. - Addressed. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 20:33, 10 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "Koda reclaimed the title of highest debut week sales for a female artist with "4 Hot Wave"" Huh? There have been lots of higher debut week sales by female artists. - It was for 2006. I added the year. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 20:33, 10 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "At the 2007 Best Hit Kayousai Koda's "Ai no Uta" earned her the Grand Prix in the pop category, also winning one of the golden awards for the 49th Nihon Record Taishō." This doesn't have a citation. - Added citations. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 02:09, 11 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "The release of "Love & Honey" marked the start of Koda's new image, ero-kakkoii where she began to wear clothing that revealed a lot of skin;" The source cited doesn't specifically state that those singles were the beginning of the ero-kakkoii style...BUT keep the source somewhere: maybe before you get the article ready for FAC, you can make a "style and image" section or something like that and note her popularization of ero kakkoii. You can find sources through things like [1] and look for interviews/articles from Oricon's website (search for Koda Kumi, using the kanji). Eh, but I've gotten off topic again. -_- |Currently looking for sources that state when the style started.
  - this article from Oricon says it started in 2005.
- (I'm too lazy to find the sentence I wrote earlier so) Koda's avex taiwan site calls the twelve singles the "Twelve Singles Project", so you can use that link as a ref. If you don't read Chinese, I'll translate on Monday (since I won't be here tomorrow, so sorry XP ack I've got to rush) - Used the site.
- "which also ranked second behind the KinKi Kids" This needs a citation. - Add

Prose and MoS
- "Koda reclaimed the title of highest debut week sales for a female artist in 2006 with "4 Hot Wave";[41] which also ranked second behind KinKi Kids "4 Hot Wave" and is Koda's nineteenth consecutive single to debut in the top 10 since "Kiseki"" Eh? - Fixed. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 19:53, 13 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Misc.
- I notice that only one section (the paragraph about "Futari de/Yume no Uta") has information on the style of the songs (that is, about the lyrics or musical style). It's not necessarily going to break the article at FAC, but I think most reviewers would prefer that an article about an artist have something more to say about him/her than the sales of the songs. Oricon often has articles on new singles, so that's a great source. On your talk page, I've compiled a list of Koda Kumi interviews etc. from Oricon, so since you read Japanese, you can use those sources. In the mean time, I've been scouring Chinese news sites for stuff on Koda, and I think that I've got some stuff that can be used in an Image/Influence/Artistry-type section.

I'll add as I go, and you can reply when you think an issue has been addressed, so I can strike it or w/e.

I'm no expert at this kind of stuff, and I only do minor things on this site, but somehow that racked me up to almost 6,000 edits! Anyway, Ink Runner has praised me a few times for my "sharp eye, I never realized how using the right dashes or little typographical mistakes are that important". I helped him out quite a bit with Ayumi Hamasaki.

I think the lead section is pretty short, even for a GA. Shouldn't it mention ero kawaii? I'll expand it.
Why is it that it doesn't have information on her early life? If I remember correctly, I read stuff awhile back about how Koda was the first girl born into that family for generations, and she dreamed of being a singer for years. - Where did you read it? I can't find anything about her early life. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 02:12, 16 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Right here, on this site. It was on her biography for a year. Here is one version of it. - There is no reference and everything that is included in the biography needs a reference.

Oh, and if all that really was true (about her family having all sons for years and years), than it would make perfect sense to me. I am not Japanese, nor do I know the language. However, Japanese use that "Kanji" thing and those are Chinese characters. They have the same meaning but different pronunciation. Her name literally translates to something like, "The God Field Does Not Come Child", but she changed it to, "Luck Does Not Come", for some reason... even though she's big now.

I found a news article that has some info anout her early life so I added it into the article. (Moon) and (Sunrise) 17:06, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Also, I thought she was misono's older sister? - She is.

So how come it is never mentioned in the article? - Because that would go into like the early life section and since no sources can be found to put in that section it wouldn't make sense to create it with a single sentence. I'll incorporate it into the lead though... (Moon) and (Sunrise) 03:34, 16 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

★Dasani★ 01:57, 16 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Final review

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
The prose might not be FA-ready yet, but that's understandable since there isn't a whole lot of information available about Koda's musical style etc. The article is MoS-compliant; it doesn't retain strange JaPANESE caPitalization, uses proper dashes, etc.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
The sources are all reliable, and there are no opinions, original research, or syntheses of opinions etc.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Though I feel that more could be addressed, such as the musical style of her releases etc., I know that such sources are hard to find (especially of her pre-2005/pre-1000 no Kotoba releases, since she wasn't all that popular then). Also, (professional) critiques of music are hard to find in Japan.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
To a Westerner unfamiliar with Japanese culture, the article might seem as if only her good points were being praised (except for the amniotic fluid incident); however, it is considered almost a faux pas to criticize harshly in Japan, so usually, entertainers are portrayed only positively, making reliable sources with critiques hard to find.
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Music samples should generally be used only to illustrate a musical style, but I suppose to readers/listeners that can understand Japanese, the lyrics will illustrate whatever. I would prefer a music sample that illustrates the style she's best known for (whatever it is), but the rationale checks out.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
I believe that the article satisfies the GA requirements, so it passes. Ink Runner (talk) 19:38, 19 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]