Talk:Kitchen Princess/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: DragonZero (talk · contribs) 04:47, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

Issues must be addressed to pass. Suggestions are suggestions DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 04:47, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

Issues

• "the substitute director" of what?
• Links to the Del Ray website do not work?
• The General source is not necessary or helpful. I'm assuming this is the lazy way of sourcing the plot, which do not necessarily require sources, through preferable.
• Ref 29 just links to the front page. You mean to link to the archive. It's date also needs to be formatted to match the rest of the article.

Suggestions

• Image is a bit big if it needs size restrictions (|230px) in the infobox.
• "| deadurl=no" for archived citewebs with non-dead links.
• I suggest removing the comma between a date range and the word "to". Ex January 30, 2007, to July 7, 2009. -> January 30, 2007 to July 7, 2009.

Hi DragonZero, and thank you for taking the time to review another article. :) I think I have now addressed all of your concerns, except the third issue. I definitely understand how you can see the "general sources" section as unhelpful. The "general sources" is used on an FA (School Rumble), though... and I feel that it might work as a happy middle between a citation for every sentence of the plot and no sources at all for the plot. On second thought, I don't care enough about this issue to argue for/against it. :) I'll just remove it, since it's important to you. Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 00:37, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

• I'm unclear on suggestion #1; would you prefer that the image be further reduced?

• I respectfully disagree with suggestion #3; that, I think, would make it grammatically incorrect, according to this: (Paragraph 9) Perhaps I'm wrong? Commas are such evil things, aren't they? So many rules to remember... :)

Passing. Issues have been resolved. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 08:19, 1 September 2013 (UTC)