Talk:Kiss in Songs

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:29, 21 December 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

It is only fair for me to take this article on for review, as you have two articles on the music GANs page and have started reviewing "Ye vs. the People" for me! --K. Peake 18:29, 21 December 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good
• "wrote it with the song's producer," → "wrote the song with the sole producer,"
• Target single to Single (music)
• "on 22 March 2019 through" → "on 22 March 2019, through"
• "to her already existing promotional tour for the album." → "for her ongoing promotional Family Tree tour."
• ""Kiss in Songs" is an" → "It is an"
• Target melancholic to Melancholia
• Remove wikilink on piano
• "on the track." → "on the song."
• "The lyrics to "Kiss in Songs" detail" → "The lyrics of "Kiss in Songs" detail"
• "communicate with, musically." → "communicate with on a musical basis."
• "It has since been performed by Oh Land" → "Oh Land has since performed the song"

Background and release

• Remove wikilink on Oh Land
• "to a number of" → "for a number of"
• "that her fifth studio album would be released" → "that her then-upcoming album would be released"
• Target single to Single (music)
• "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
• "The song's cover artwork uses" → "The song's cover art uses"
• "created by Danish artist" → "that was created by Danish artist"
• "On the parent album, it appears as the fourth track." → "On 3 May 2019, "Kiss in Songs" was included as the fourth track on Oh Land's fifth studio album Family Tree." though this should be the last sentence of the para instead
• "serves as the third single" → "served as the third single"
• "The release of "Kiss in Songs" came" → "The song's release came"
• "for her promotional" → "for Oh Land's promotional"
• "that the song serves as" → "that it serves as"
• "It was written by" → ""Kiss in Songs" was written by"
• "who also produced the track." → "the latter of which solely produced the track."
• "She received additional credits" → "Oh Land received additional credits"
• Wikilink Sterling Sound Studios per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
• "Patrick Dillett and Peter Pejtsik serves" → "Patrick Dillett, while Peter Pejtsik served"

Composition and lyrics

• Target melancholic to Melancholia
• "backed by piano and" → "that is backed by piano and"
• "called the song among" → "placed the song among"
• "He also claimed that the song's instrumental introduction" → "He also stated that the instrumental introduction" because you don't want to write "the song" too much
• "who also was in charge" → "who was also in charge"
• Wikilink arrangements
• Second para looks good
• "Lyrically, the song finds" → "Lyrically, "Kiss in Songs" features"
• Where is this sentence backed up by [13]; the ref only shows her interest in music when speaking about the song, not about how a love interest communicated with her?
• "understands my language"." → "understands my language."" since this is a full sentence being quoted
• "And I'm missing you"." → "And I'm missing you.""

Critical reception

• Retitle to Reception and promotion, merging with the below section since both are only one para
• The opening sentence is incorrect due to only one reviewer in the para calling it one of the best songs; change to ""Kiss in Songs" was met with generally favourable reviews from music critics," then add what was praised in similar phrasing to the lead
• "Rosenstand Svidt featured the song" → "Svidt featured the song"
• Mention what week it was
• "also considered it among" → "also considered the song among"
• "and explained it may contain" → "and explained that it may contain"
• "happiest-sounding songs on" → "happiest-sounding tracks on"
• Remove entertainment website intro because that is unnecessary
• "also called it a beautiful song and" → "also called "Kiss in Songs" a beautiful song, and"

Live performances

• This should be the second para of the suggested reception and promotion section
• "At the concert," → "During the concert,"
• "followed by album tracks" → "followed by fellow album tracks"
• "found that these songs" → "found that the aforementioned songs"
• "of the show." → "of Oh Land's show."

Track listing

• Good

Credits and personnel

• Are you sure the personnel are ordered correctly based on their credits?
• Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)

Release history

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks good at 21.3%
• Great job with the consistent archiving!
• Target Amazon.com to Amazon (company) on ref 2 and remove (US)
• Wikilink Apple Music on ref 7
• Remove (US) from ref 8
• Target Sterling Sound to Sterling Sound Studios on ref 12
• mxdwn.com → Mxdwn.com on ref 13
• Middle name should be in the firstname parameter instead for ref 14

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until the issues are fixed, though the article is quite well-written for the most part! --K. Peake 09:46, 22 December 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake – I believe I have addressed all of your comments within my edits. Thanks for reviewing another nomination of mine. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Carbrera (talk) 04:21, 27 December 2020 (UTC).

Carbrera Did a few copyedits for you, and I will now gladly ✓ Pass this article; thank you for getting another article in GA-status! --K. Peake 07:48, 27 December 2020 (UTC)