Talk:Kirby's Dream Course/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:28, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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"control Kirby" any chance of telling us who/what Kirby is?
- Tried saying "the character Kirby". Kinda hard to not go into too much detail about what he is in something that short.
Link power-up.
- Done.
Which Engvar? We have "favorable" (USEng) and "cancelled" (UKEng)...
- Settled with "canceled".
Hirokazu Ando is mentioned in the infobox but not in the article or referenced?
- The mindset that most have on WP:VG (at least, I'm quite sure of it) is that for the staff listings, the game itself is the source and doesn't require any additional citations.
Directors and producers are similarly mentioned there but not referenced or mentioned in the prose.
- Same reason as above
Image captions which are complete sentences need a full stop.
- Done
"September 21, 1994 as" comma after 1994.
- Done.
Where is European release date ref'd?
- Couldn't find a reliable source for its European release date, so I just listed 1995. Somebody can always add the date back if they've got a source to back it up.
"one of 30" one of thirty.
- Done
'demonstrated as a playable demo" demo/demo repeat.
- Done.
""though its concepts " some of them?
- Done.
" time.[16][15] " order.
- Done.
"of Computer & Video Games believed i" and not &
- They're also known as Computer & Video Games, though since the article uses "and" instead of the ampersand I just used "and".
" novelty.[5][4] " order.
- Done. I keep forgetting to do this.
Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be en-dashes per MOS.
- Done.

I'm not convinced that the production staff are verified by the game itself. Can you show me a discussion where consensus concluded to that effect? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:59, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man: I'm certain there was some kind of discussion regarding this, but I'm unable to find it right now. For the time being, I've chosen to remove the staff credits. Namcokid 47 22:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]