Talk:Kingdom Come (Millennium)/GA1
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 17:58, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
Once again, only a few issues:
- Plot: "who had previously worked together on a case involved the murders of three clerics several years earlier." involved should be involving
- Plot: "Black sees similarities between the murders and the methods of torture employed by the medieval Inquisition; which is confirmed when a Protestant minister is drowned in imitation of another ritual torture." I would separate these into two sentences and change 'which' to 'this'
- Plot: "Black has constructing a profile of the man" Change to "Black constructs a profile of the man"
Man, I really need to watch this show! On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 18:30, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks again. I think I've got these sorted now. GRAPPLE X 21:59, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
- No problem. I pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 00:47, 4 March 2012 (UTC)