Talk:King Charles's Castle/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Caponer (talk · contribs) 01:01, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hchc2009, upon my initial review of this article, it meets the majority of criteria for Good Article status. I will review this article more thoroughly in the coming days and I will share my comments and suggestions here for you to address before passing this to Good Article status. Thank you for all your continued extraordinary contributions to Wikipedia! -- Caponer (talk) 01:01, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Hchc2009, even though this article looks just about ready for passage to Good Article status, I have a few questions and comments that need to be addressed below. A lot of these are nit-picky, but with such an incredibly written article, I could not make more substantial suggestions. Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns for me in the meantime! Again, you've done a fantastic job on this article! -- Caponer (talk) 01:38, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the first paragraph of the Construction subsection, you mention "spilled over into war in 1538." Does this refer to a specific named conflict or war?

I've never seen it named. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the second paragraph of the Construction subsection, would it flow better to reword the first sentence as the following: As a result of the inspection, Sir Francis Flemming, the Lieutenant-General of the Ordnance, was tasked in February 1558 with improving the defences on the islands. Flemming was supported in this effort with a shipment of lead to aid in construction, and money raised from the dissolution of the monasteries in England.

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

At the end of paragraph 4, you may want to remove to from "through to the end of 1552."

I've tweaked to retain the sense - see what you think. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

After "St Mary's," you may also want to make a second sentence consisting of "At least 540 oak trees from South Wales were dispatched to the islands in early 1550, since the islands lacked suitable sources of timber of their own."

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the fifth paragraph of the Construction subsection, you should consider rewording "the decision was taken at the end of 1552" to "it was decided at the end of 1552."

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Under the Weaknesses subsection, Sixteenth century should be spelled out as it starts the sentence.

I've tweaked a bit. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You may also want to add a comma after 1554 in the first paragraph of the Weaknesses subsection. With this usage, overlooking can be written as one word.

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the first paragraph under 17th-century, you may want to link and explicitly state during the English Civil War.

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the second paragraph, you should probably place a comma following 1651.

Done. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

You may consider renaming the last History section from "18th–21st centuries" to "18th century-present"

The term "present" is cautioned against by some editors, so I tend to go for century in this context. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

For paragraphs where only one source is used, it is only necessary to utilize one internal citation at the end of the paragraph.

I'm in the "cite per sentence" camp, mainly because it makes porting text easier, but also because I've had huge issues over the years working through paragraphs trying to work out if a paragraph citation supports all the text. Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the review! Hchc2009 (talk) 15:16, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hchc2009, you have sufficiently addressed all my above concerns and suggestions, and it is my pleasure to formally pass this article to Good Article status! Congratulations on a job well done, and thank you tremendously for your contributions in illustrating British history on Wikipedia! -- Caponer (talk) 22:05, 2 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]