Talk:Khecarī mudrā/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:27, 8 September 2021 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for taking this on. The GAN bot has gone berserk because of the diacritics in the title so things will need to be done manually. (We ought to move the article after this has finished.) Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:02, 9 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• No worries re: diacritics, your plan works fine.
  • OK.

• I don't think we need to link common words like "mouth".
  • Fixed.

• Ok, now I know what this is, I can safely say it's the most curious practice I've ever seen...
  • Yes.

• The images of the four stages don't show the frenulum.
  • Indeed. Not sure we can do about that: there's no way I can think of to show it that will be at all helpful or explanatory to readers; the image shows the result of the process.

• The caption in the lead talks about manipulating the bindu. I think something should be said in the lead as to why this practice is carried out, what does it supposedly bring to the person performing it?
  • Added.

• "yoga is a branch of the largely spiritual practice of yoga, practised" yoga, practice, yoga, practised... in one sentence, needs a bit of rethinking.
  • Yes. Rejigged.

• "are siddhis or magical powers and mukti, liberation. " are there links for siddhis or mukti?
  • Linked.

• "and bindu" in the article isn't italics, in the caption it was?
  • Fixed.

• "Variant spellings include Khechari mudra" I think the variant spellings gets in the way of the practice and how the practice develops.
  • Mm, yes. Moved to footnote.

• "Siva, in the same" who?
  • Glossed and linked.

• Per MOS:ELLIPSIS, should be a non-breaking space before those in the big quote.
  • Added.

• "6-7" en-dash.
  • Fixed.

• "practice.[b][22][c][10] " ref order.
  • Reordered.

• Page ranges in the refs need an end-ash, not a hyphen.
  • Fixed.

• ISBNs could be consistently presented.
  • Converted the old-style ones.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:55, 9 September 2021 (UTC)

• All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:02, 9 September 2021 (UTC)