Talk:Khalili Collection of Aramaic Documents/GA2
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Reviewer: Ganesha811 (talk · contribs) 19:00, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
Hi! I'm opening a Good Article Nomination review. Hoping to complete the review over the next couple of days. I'll be using the template below. Ganesha811 (talk) 19:00, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for this review Ganesha811. At the top of the References section is an attribution template which links to https://www.nasserdkhalili.com/the-eight-collections-2/ . At the foot of that page is a CC-BY-SA 3.0 declaration. That is why I've been able to use some text from that page. MartinPoulter (talk) 10:52, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, thanks, looks good - and I see the credit down in the article as well. I'll continue with the review. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:35, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, just wanted to let you know I will be very busy for the next week, but will return to this review immediately afterwards. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:01, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- Ganesha811 No problems, thanks for telling me. MartinPoulter (talk) 20:07, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, returning to this today. Appreciate your patience. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Ganesha811 Great to see progress. I've created a Background section as you requested and deleted the text about specific other collections. As to how to describe Khalili himself, you've seen on the article about him that he is notable for collecting art, for philanthropic work, and he has published research and a textbook. I've removed "scholar" if we have to cut down that description, but if we remove "collector" or "philanthropist" that really seems an incomplete description. Note that this is just factual description: there's no opinion expressed about the value of his philanthropic work and whether it makes the world a better place, just that he does it. He's different from a pure "collector" in that he funds public exhibition of the art, funds research in universities, and so on. Hence "collector" on its own might give an incorrect impression.
- You don't have to take on faith that the Naveh and Shaked book is credible: it was reviewed in a scholarly journal by someone with no connection to the Khalili organisation (ref 7 in the current version). This ref is used to support that the documents are significant for study, and if the book were promotional rather than scholarly I expect that would have been brought up in that review. MartinPoulter (talk) 09:36, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, thank you for your edits. I'll keep going through the review. Forgive my general air of suspicion - it's just that my antenna are always up for promotionalism, and never more so than when we are borrowing content directly from a source, as in this article. You also have a (properly declared) conflict of interest as the Wikimedian in residence for this foundation, so I view it as my role to be more skeptical than usual during the review to keep Wikipedia as it should be. Nothing to do with you personally (or Khalili for that matter), just on principle. Ganesha811 (talk) 13:02, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- No problem - nothing personal taken and I hope I'm not coming across as defensive. I'm conscious of my own conflict of interest, and valuing the input of those whose antennae are up for promotionalism (or other problems) is just why I'm putting my work through these review processes. Some choices I've put a lot of thought into and want to defend; others can clearly be improved upon and I'll happily make suggested improvements. Cheers, MartinPoulter (talk) 17:11, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- Ok, the one thing left is my suggestion on neutral language - other than that we're all set. Let me know what you think! Ganesha811 (talk) 19:01, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
- I've removed the two "considered the most important" clauses as you suggested. Honestly, it's now looking to me like the article needs to be more informative. When I read that this collection is one of eight Khalili Collections collected by Khalili, it's natural to want a bit of context (that can be given in one sentence) about how these collections relate to each other or to other collections in the world. Since the other bits of further information have been ruled out, would you be okay with me adding that the eight collections have a total of 35,000 artefacts? That would give the reader a clearer picture of what's meant by the Khalili Collections, it would allow them to infer that Aramaic Documents is one of the smaller collections, and it's an objective quantity that can be found in multiple sources. MartinPoulter (talk) 12:54, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
- Ok, the one thing left is my suggestion on neutral language - other than that we're all set. Let me know what you think! Ganesha811 (talk) 19:01, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
- No problem - nothing personal taken and I hope I'm not coming across as defensive. I'm conscious of my own conflict of interest, and valuing the input of those whose antennae are up for promotionalism (or other problems) is just why I'm putting my work through these review processes. Some choices I've put a lot of thought into and want to defend; others can clearly be improved upon and I'll happily make suggested improvements. Cheers, MartinPoulter (talk) 17:11, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, thank you for your edits. I'll keep going through the review. Forgive my general air of suspicion - it's just that my antenna are always up for promotionalism, and never more so than when we are borrowing content directly from a source, as in this article. You also have a (properly declared) conflict of interest as the Wikimedian in residence for this foundation, so I view it as my role to be more skeptical than usual during the review to keep Wikipedia as it should be. Nothing to do with you personally (or Khalili for that matter), just on principle. Ganesha811 (talk) 13:02, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, returning to this today. Appreciate your patience. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Ganesha811 No problems, thanks for telling me. MartinPoulter (talk) 20:07, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, just wanted to let you know I will be very busy for the next week, but will return to this review immediately afterwards. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:01, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, thanks, looks good - and I see the credit down in the article as well. I'll continue with the review. Ganesha811 (talk) 15:35, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
- MartinPoulter, sure, that sounds fine. I'm going to assume that this addition will not have a negative impact on the article, and say that otherwise, this is ready to pass GA! Congrats to you and anyone else who worked on the article. I'll do the needful now. Ganesha811 (talk) 14:01, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). |
The source this article most relies upon, Naveh and Shaked, was published by the Khalili family trust. Given their credentials, I'm willing to accept it, but it would be worth scanning the article closely again to make sure it does not resemble any kind of advertising for this private collection. For instance, do we need to describe Khalili as "scholar, collector and philanthropist"? We could probably pick just one of those words and be fine.
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2c. it contains no original research. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. |
The Collection comprises 48 historically significant Aramaic documents from Ancient Bactria, consisting of mainly letters and accounts related to the court of the satrap of Bactria. Together these letters and accounts make up the oldest known correspondence of the administration of Bactria and Sogdiana. The documents, written in Official Aramaic, were likely to originate from the historical city of Balkh and all are dated within a period of less than 30 years, between 353BC to 324BC. The newest of the documents were written during Alexander the Great’s early reign in the region. It feels as though this has just been broken broken up a little and scattered into the article. Needs to be fixed to avoid borrowed phrasing.
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. |
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. |
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7. Overall assessment. | Pass |