Talk:Kenny Williams (basketball, born 1972)/GA1

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Heyo! I'll review this tomorrow (2 August UTC). ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

There we go! Short but sweet. On hold. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 19:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome work! Passing another great article. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:36, 18 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

Prose

Wikilink basketball in the lead as is standard for basketball player articles.
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 15 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"At Lyons, Williams" – Lyons? Also:
- Now "At Lyons High School, Williams"-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:05, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Recommend opening with his full name as it is his first mention in the body.
- Now "At Lyons High School, Kenny Williams"-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:07, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"His senior season team got off to a 9–1 start" – recommend "His senior season team commenced with a 9–1 start" for better wording.
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:09, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"He committed to UIC" – change to "He committed to the University of Illinois Chicago (UIC)" and unlink and abbreviate its mention in § College.
- Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:12, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"surpassing Chuck Lambert" – do we know what year/date Lambert set the record?
- Added from the WP:IC.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:14, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Summit League as first mention in the lead.
- OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:16, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"and is the All-time Flames leader in steals (237)" – recommend "and is the All-time Flames leader in steals with 237" in this context for better flow.
- done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:17, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"was second in the MCC" – MCC?
- I think I corrected this correctly.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:20, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"along with Kenny Battle, Rickey Green, and Sonny Parker to name a few" – eh, do we really need to name them?
- His notability is modest, so I am throwing in a few blue links to show people who were of a similar stature. Heck, the sources include the names so why not.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:22, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  - Sounds good! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:36, 18 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The lose sentences in § Professional career can definitely be combined to form some longer paragraphs.
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:23, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Refs

Passes spotcheck on refs 5 (useable for sports reporting per WP:NYPOST), 11, 12 and 25.

Others

In external links, capitalise the 'c' in college stats.
- done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:18, 16 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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