Talk:Kenneth R. Shadrick/GA1
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Reviewer: DThomsen8 (talk) 21:34, 8 August 2011 (UTC)
As a biography, this article should have a completed persondata template. The article also needs copy editing. For example, "As he was 17 years old at the time, Shadrick had to convince his parents to papers allowing him to enlist." This probably means he had to have his parents sign permission papers, but it doesn't say so. There are other places which could be clearer. I would suggest that the Guild of Copy Editors should be requested to do a copy edit. --DThomsen8 (talk) 21:34, 8 August 2011 (UTC)
- Persondata template added. I have performed another copy edit, please let me know if you still see any major grammatical issues in the article. —Ed!(talk) 04:36, 9 August 2011 (UTC)
This review's apparently been abandoned (poked the reviewer, as did you multiple times), so I'm putting it back in the queue. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:27, 8 September 2011 (UTC)