Talk:Kenneth Gärdestad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:33, 22 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is a touch brief, could add some more about Eurovision, book writing, activism etc.
Our article on Oh, vilken härlig dag has a g, rather than a ', can we be consistent?
"in Eurovision 1979 finishing" comma after 1979.
"Lyricist Gärdestad..." weird, probably switch "Lyricist" for "Kenneth"... and perhaps "writing lyrics performed by Lotta..."
"He took part again in Melodifestivalen 2010 with" well no, he took part in Melodifestivalen again, not the 2010 version again.
"Musikförläggarnas pris" is there an article for this on Swedish Wikipedia?
and for his work in it, and many wonderful lyrics."[7] - missing an opening quote mark somewhere.
Most articles like this usually have a section listing the awards in one place.
"wrote the book Jag vill ha en egen måne (2005), a biography..." probably don't need "the book" as you go on to refer to it as a biography so it's pretty clear it's a book.
Ted – För kärlekens skull - our article uses a colon rather than a spaced en-dash. Consistency once again?
Again, do we have a .sv article for Peter Viitanen?
"(last episode season 7)" probably not required as you mention that in the prose in the following sentence.
"was head architect" can we put a timeframe on that?
"There are more than 80 Kunskapsskolan schools..." not sure how directly relevant it is to this bio.
"Gärdestad revealed..." Kenneth. Perhaps in fact make that a first sentence of a new paragraph and then merge the death sentence.
"Ted Gärdestadstipendiet" in the caption, "Ted Gärdestad Stipend" in the article, perhaps be consistent.
Avoid SHOUTING in the refs.
Since those ref publishers/works aren't necessarily well known to English speakers, perhaps you could link them where you can.

That's about it on a first run through. It's on hold for the moment. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:34, 22 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much for good pointers. I have tried to fix the issues you pointed out. Please let me know if I missed something. I am looking forward to any possible further notes. Thanks again.BabbaQ (talk) 18:22, 22 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

BabbaQ no problem, I've tweaked it a few times, feel free to work it over again, but I'm now satisfied we have a GA here. Well done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:21, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. It feels great that the article now is GA. And thank you for all your help and good notes. BabbaQ (talk) 17:37, 23 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]