Talk:Kenneth Bainbridge/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 19:05, 17 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Hawkeye7 (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 19:05, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Early life "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 2: Early career "His precise measurements of mass differences between nuclear isotopes allowed him to confirm Albert Einstein's mass-energy equivalence concept.[1]" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 3: World War II "He was the Director of the Manhattan Project's Trinity nuclear test, which took place July 16, 1945. Bainbridge called the Trinity explosion a "foul and awesome display" and remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 4: Postwar "This marked the beginning of his dedication to ending the testing of nuclear weapons and to efforts to maintain civilian control of future developments in that field." (summarised well in the lead) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Early life "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Early career "His precise measurements of mass differences between nuclear isotopes allowed him to confirm Albert Einstein's mass-energy equivalence concept.[1]" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: World War II "He was the Director of the Manhattan Project's Trinity nuclear test, which took place July 16, 1945. Bainbridge called the Trinity explosion a "foul and awesome display" and remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4: Postwar "This marked the beginning of his dedication to ending the testing of nuclear weapons and to efforts to maintain civilian control of future developments in that field." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Kenneth Tompkins Bainbridge (July 27, 1904 – July 14, 1996) was an American physicist at Harvard University who did work on cyclotron research." Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO):  Done Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER):  Done Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):  Done Check for Links to sister projects:  Done Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
Done Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google.)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with the other FAs: Edmund Herring, Neil Hamilton Fairley, Landing at Nadzab, Albert Kesselring, James Whiteside McCay, Harry Chauvel, Thomas C. Kinkaid, Leslie Groves, J. Robert Oppenheimer, Kenneth Walker, Thomas Blamey, Douglas MacArthur, Frank Berryman, James B. Conant, Iven Mackay, Walter Krueger, Vernon Sturdee, Enrico Fermi, Niels Bohr Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: Yes Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:
Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Cross-checked with the other FAs: Edmund Herring, Neil Hamilton Fairley, Landing at Nadzab, Albert Kesselring, James Whiteside McCay, Harry Chauvel, Thomas C. Kinkaid, Leslie Groves, J. Robert Oppenheimer, Kenneth Walker, Thomas Blamey, Douglas MacArthur, Frank Berryman, James B. Conant, Iven Mackay, Walter Krueger, Vernon Sturdee, Enrico Fermi, Niels Bohr Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (PD)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Check for copyright status:  Done Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done

I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:

• I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis.
• "Bainbridge called the Trinity explosion a "foul and awesome display" and remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" (Can you break it into simpler sentences to make it easy to follow?)
  • split into two sentences. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "After the explosion of the first atomic bomb went off without such drama, in what he later described as ""a foul and awesome display",[2] he turned to Oppenheimer and said, "now we are all sons of bitches."" (Can you break it into simpler sentences to make it easy to follow?)
  • split into two sentences. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" ("Now" or "now"?)
  • It should be capitalised, per the original source. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "When his Guggenheim fellowship expired in September 1934, he return to the United States, where he accepted an associate professorship at Harvard University."
  • Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "There was little interest in their work only because research was being carried out elsewhere.[18]"
  • Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "He initially led E-2, the instrumentation group, which developed x-ray instrumentation for examining explosions." (I think it should be "X-ray")
  • Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
• "The had a son, Martin Keeler, and two daughters, Joan and Margaret Tomkins."
  • Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Hawkeye7, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:12, 20 February 2014 (UTC)

• All points addressed. Thanks for your review. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks, Hawkeye7, very much for your diligence, care and precision in writing such great articles. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:00, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:00, 21 February 2014 (UTC)