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GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 00:07, 21 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I will be this article's reviewer. Ruby 2010/2013 00:07, 21 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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Lead
  • "She has been a member of the Australia women's national water polo team at the junior and senior level" - this could be better specified by gauging the time (amt of years or span of years)
  • Also, I think placing the tournaments in the order they were played would be better (2010, 2011)
  • The lead also could use a copyedit (each sentence starts with "she" a lot, which is hard on the eyes)
  • When did she win "a championship as a member of the Brisbane Barracudas in the National Water Polo League"? (you give so many years already, that it seems odd not to have one for this championship)
  • What does "the junior and senior level" mean? I don't intend for you to add unnecessary detail, but are there any wikilinks you could input here to aid readers?
      • Not sure how to fix this other than creating an article for the Australian women's national under-20 team, which could probably be written that way. But yeah, one is an open team for the top players regardless of age who compete in all events. (Hence, senior.) The juniors are an age restricted development squad that feed to the senior team. (They also compete internationally and represent the country.) --LauraHale (talk) 03:46, 21 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life
Water polo

I'm glad you've chosen to focus on female athletics; you've really been productively editing! I don't think this article needs too much extra work to bring it to GA, so I'll place it on hold for seven days. You can respond here when you've finished adding your improvements. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:20, 21 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm satisfied with your changes. Passing the article for GA. Nice work! Ruby 2010/2013 05:14, 21 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]