Talk:Kelan Martin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Think the lead could do with a expansion to summarise his whole career.

Early life

• Wikilink points, rebounds and three-point range since they are basketball jargon that need understanding by non-basketball readers of the article.
• "Kenneth was on the state championship team at Louisville’s Ballard High School in Louisville and won a NCAA Division II championship at Kentucky Wesleyan." - remove the second mention of Louisville since you have already established the city is where the school is based. Also add the appropriate wikilink for NCAA Division II basketall
• "He quit football as a sophomore" - He stopped playing football as a sophomore
• "The Bruins were ranked number 1" - Number 1 should be spelt out per MOS:NUMERAL
• "including the deciding 3-pointer" - same issue as the point above

Freshman

• "in a 74-66 upset of fifth-ranked North Carolina" - over

Sophomore

• Explain what double-doubles mean
• "he lost some weight and attended an Adidas-sponsored camp" - I don't believe the sponsor of the camp is relevant. Thus, it should be written as an training camp
• "On the season," - change to Over the course of the season,
• "He was marred by a slump at the end of the season." - Was it a slump of form? If so, please change this for non-basketball readers.

Junior

• Change the two mentions of Big East player of the week to as Big East Player of the Week
• "and dished out four assists" - "dished out" is not encyclopedic language
• "All‐District 5 Second Team. on" - remove the period between "Team" and "on"
• "Martin did an internship with a TV station" - better, Martin undertook an internship with the TV station
• Wikilink Julius Erving Award, WTHR and the NBA Draft; the third of which should be specifically linked to 2017 NBA Draft

Overall you've made a good effort but I'm putting this on hold until the changes have been implemented. MWright96 (talk) 21:29, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Looks like the nominator hasn't edited since July. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:46, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Hello, I decided to take over editing the page since the nominator hasn't edited in the past four months. I have taken care of the issues pointed out here in order for it to be considered for GA status, but if its too late because of the 7 day hold period already being passed, I understand. DepressedPer (talk) 15:51, 27 November 2017 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.