Talk:Keelin Winters/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 03:17, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:

..."last played for Seattle Reign FC of the NWSL..." Shouldn't it be "the Seattle Reign FC", or is that a style used for soccer clubs I'm unaware of?

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"She was a member of the senior national team's player pool and was allocated by U.S. Soccer during the NWSL Player Allocation." So does this mean she was with the senior team, or not? It's unclear.

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 05:40, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"She played collegiate soccer for the University of Portland and was named West Coast Conference (WCC) Player of the Year in 2010." This is at the end of a paragraph regarding her international experience; wouldn't it be more appropriate to move it to the first paragraph, just for uniformity?

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In the early life section, isn't it reasonable to link to Brian Winters, considering he has a page and is notable enough to mention his own career?

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"She has five siblings." Any idea about them, like brothers or sisters?

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 05:40, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"She was also named National Team of the Week on two separate occasions." She was named the team itself, or to the team?

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"In 2010, she was named West Coast Conference (WCC) Player of the Year." Is there anyway to either add this to a preceding paragraph or expand on it so it's not just a one-line paragraph?

Combined. Hmlarson (talk) 05:46, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"During the 2011 WPS season, she recorded three goals and two assists during the regular season." In how many games?

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 04:51, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"The team finished second in the Western Conference with a 10–3–1 record." Clarify if that record is win-loss-tie or win-tie-loss. I see that this is noted later in the section, but this and a few other cases don't have that note attached to it.

Added template. Hmlarson (talk) 04:51, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"...during the 2012/2013 season with eight starts." Earlier in the article a season is listed as "2006–2007," whereas this case is different. Keep consistency throughout, using just one of these styles.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 05:47, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"...lone game-winning goal.." If it's the lone goal, isn't it by definition the game-winner?

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The image in the "Seattle Reign FC, 2013–2016" section should have a note on what player is Winters (either the left or right player).

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Winters had previously announced her retirement following the end of the season." This is a really weird sentence. It would be better to go with something like: "Winters retired at the end of the season; she had previously announced her intentions to do so," or something along those lines.

Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 04:44, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is there any reason for a lack of a statistics section in the article? Most soccer articles have it, so I'd assume this would to.

It would mostly be a duplication of what's already in the infobox. For other GAs for players who have scored international goals (like Megan Rapinoe, for example, there are more details to include - but not in this case. Hmlarson (talk) 05:52, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In general the article could really use some copyediting, as the writing is rather mechanical and stiff. It would really serve to help the article to make it flow better.

Made some minor edits throughout. Hmlarson (talk) 06:09, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

References: 1, 2, 7, 13, 18, 19, 21, 47 are all deadlinks.

Updated with archive urls. Hmlarson (talk) 05:40, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

External links: The "Seattle Sounders Women player profile" is a deadlink.

Updated with archive url. Hmlarson (talk) 05:40, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it for now. Kaiser matias (talk) 03:17, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking a look and providing feedback Kaiser matias. When you have a chance, can you let me know if any other changes needed? Hmlarson (talk) 21:13, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah I saw you went through the article. I plan to look it over once again when I have a proper amount of time; don't want to rush through it of course. Should be done in a day or so. Kaiser matias (talk) 02:10, 11 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

And took a look. Much improved now. Kaiser matias (talk) 12:07, 11 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]