Talk:Kaworu Nagisa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 23:10, 30 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I'll be reviewing this article. First I'll give it a big look and might list any possible issues in this section.Tintor2 (talk) 23:10, 30 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

First of all the lead feels a bit complicated in terms of theme. I would recommend the first paragraph to focus on his main appearances, the second about his creation and voice, and the third one about general reception. Since the character has been more prominent in 3.0 maybe such film should be highlighted in the lead.

Done Check it out

"Fifth Child and a Nerv agency pilot" sounds a bit confusing as normal readers would be confused what is exactly the former

Done I will have to remove it from the other articles too, then.

Creation

"Saigo no shisha": I'm pretty sure "Saigo" means "last" but I would add literal translation too.

Done

The second paragraph lacks the first link of Shinji Ikari and an explanation to who he is.

Done

"According to some fans, he may have also used Kunihiko Ikuhara, the director of the animated series Sailor Moon and a friend of his, as a model. In an interview, Ikuhara denied the rumors, comparing Kaworu's cynical personality to Anno himself, while stating he was not in the least involved in the creation of the character. He also said he had close correspondence with Anno, with whom he was on good terms from the early design stages of Neon Genesis Evangelion." Lacks a reference

Done

Appearances

"Kaworu has the appearance of a boy with gray hair, pale complexion, and red eyes,[50][51] and usually refers to human beings with the term Lilim.[52]" This is a bit random. The design of the character should be left to be subject of discussion only if the artists like Sadamoto mention him (which I think it's already done) as well as for alt of images.

Done

By any chance did something happen to Kaworu's minirole in "End of Evangelion"? I remember he was a judge with the other Rei when Gendo is rejected by Rei 3. Since it's a small mention you could mix it with Neon Genesis Evangelion and make a "Neon Genesis Evangelion and The End of Evangelion"

Done But I'm not sure about the title. Since there is a continuity I would simply leave "Neon Genesis Evangelion".

That's all for today. Will check later sections later. Good work in the article.Tintor2 (talk) 00:39, 1 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"Wired compared Kaworu with Ryo Asuka, the main antagonist of Gō Nagai's Devilman." I can imagine the comparison but the article just leaves it like this. Is it possible to explain why?

The character ranked high in popularity polls.[156][157][158][159][160 This is quite an overkill. Can you expand on the prose like "based on the impact in his series[156], among others"
Both Chris Beveridge and Dani Cavallaro seem to have the same opinion so you could mix them togetherl.

The rest feels easy to understand to me. Fix the issues I'll gladly pass it.Tintor2 (talk) 13:44, 1 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Passing the review. Good work in the article.Tintor2 (talk) 16:59, 1 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]