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GA Review

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Lead
  • "She appeared in Robert Redford's 1998 film The Horse Whisperer." I find this second line a bit odd, unless this is what she is most famous for. If so, I'd link it to the first line. Or perhaps it was her first role. However, I'll wait for your reply here.
  • "Bosworth starred in the television series Young Americans, in which she played Bella Banks, though, the series was cancelled at the end of the summer." No need for comma after though. "end of the summer" does not mean anything out of context of the year, which isn't mentioned here.
  • "In her personal life, Bosworth has dated actors Matt Czuchry (2000–2002) and Orlando Bloom (2002–2005)." Lose the brackets and turn to prose or simply lose the years, i.e. "In her personal life, Bosworth has dated actors Matt Czuchry, from 2000 to 2002, and Orlando Bloom, from 2002 to 2005." or "In her personal life, Bosworth has dated actors Matt Czuchry and Orlando Bloom.
  • "She is currently dating English model turned singer-songwriter James Rousseau." Remove currently per WP:DATE. "She is" does the exact job that "currently" does, it's a superfluous word.
Early life

The box under her photo says she was born in 1987. It is a completely different birthdate and year from the description in the article.Mylittlezach (talk) 15:51, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That was a quick fix, but now I realize that the birthdate is incorrect in the first sentence after her name as well.Mylittlezach (talk) 15:55, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Career
Personal life

Generally it's quite good. Most of the points are all minor. My main concern would be the first paragraph of the lead, starting with the odd second line. The first par seems to be just an abridged version of the "career" section, which isn't entirely a bad thing, but just lacks a bit of structure to ease the copy flow. Peanut4 (talk) 00:33, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Re-review
  • Great work. Some simple changes which have brought the article on brilliantly. I've just one minor point to bring up.
    • "Bosworth starred in the television series Young Americans, in which she played Bella Banks, though the series was cancelled." This doesn't appear anywhere in the article. And also since I asked you to remove "end of the summer", I realise this sentence looks incomplete. It needs some timeframe to qualify it was presumably cancelled fairly quickly. "End of the summer" wasn't quite right, but something similar is needed. Peanut4 (talk) 22:45, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • Alright, I added the info. in the Career section. As for the sentence in the lead, I sorta re-worded it, but I don't think adding "timeframe" would help at all. Unless, you'd like the sentence to have the timeframe. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:27, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Looks fine now. Just for the wording in the main body "The series, however, was cancelled." Do you know why and after how long? Other than that, we'll be ready for a pass. Peanut4 (talk) 23:31, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Good sound basis of an article. Meets all the GA criteria. Peanut4 (talk) 19:11, 1 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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