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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:33, 19 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Reunited once again; I will take this article on. --K. Peake 11:33, 19 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove formats from the infobox since they are no longer supposed to be used
  • Remove tropical as a genre since only the beat is tropical
  • WP:OVERLINK on Mark Ralph under producers
  • "The song was written by" → "It was written by" plus this should be swapped with the production sentence
  • "Ryan McMahon, Ryan Rabin, and her boyfriend Jack Patterson." → "Ryan McMahon, Patterson, and Ryan Rabin."
  • "Patterson produced the track" → "Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson produced the song" since this will be the second sentence in the new order
  • "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
  • "as the album's fifth and final single in the United States" → "in the United States as the album's fifth and final single" with the appropriate target
  • "she wasn't initially aware of it." → "she was not initially aware of the inspiration."
  • "The track is a" → "It is a"
  • "beat and lyrics that describe" → "beat, which lyrically describes"
  • "it recalled her earlier works while others found it" → "the song recalled Marina's earlier works, while other critics found it"
  • "appears on Marina's sixth extended play," → "was released on Marina's sixth EP,"
  • "A music video using" → "A music video that uses"
  • "who dances in a studio space." → "who dances."
  • "The song was included on the setlist to" → "The original version was included on the setlist of"
  • "She also performed it live" → "Marina also performed the song"
  • "promotional appearance in the United States." → "promotional appearance in the US"

Background and release

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  • "In order to proceed with a new era" → "For proceeding with a new era"
  • "in order to perform as just" → "in order to release music as just"
  • "She explained that to Dazed in January 2019:" → "She explained that,"
  • Why is Luis Fonsi mentioned here when he is not in the other articles with the same background?
  • "under her new name." → "under the new name."
  • "and an accompanying multi-leg concert tour." → "and first as Marina." since current info is irrelevant
  • "as the twelfth track overall and fourth on the Fear portion of the album." → "as the twelfth track on the album and the fourth on the Fear portion of it.
  • "Love + Fear is a" → "Conceptually, Love + Fear is a"
  • "experiencing these two emotions." → "experiencing the aforementioned two emotions."
  • "Ryan Rabin, and Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson, of British group Clean Bandit." → "Ryan Rabin, and Patterson." plus this should be the sentence after the production one
  • "It was produced by Patterson and" → ""Karma" was produced by Marina's boyfriend Jack Patterson, of British group Clean Bandit, and"
  • "was first released on 26 April 2019, when the rest of Love + Fear was released to the public." → "was released on 26 April 2019, as the twelfth track on Marina's fourth studio album Love + Fear."
  • "For its release as a commercial single, it was sent to music distributor" → "For its release as a single, the song was sent to"
  • Was the release definitely digital download and streaming, since Spotify is a known streaming service?
  • "on 29 August 2019 through" → "on 29 August 2019, through"
  • "and featured on the track listing for her seventh extended play, Love + Fear (Acoustic) on" → "and featured as the third track on her seventh EP Love + Fear (Acoustic), released on"
  • "The new version was produced" → "The version was produced"

Composition and lyrics

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  • "is a pop song with a" → "is a pop song, with a"
  • "accompanied by instruments" → "being accompanied by instruments"
  • "The original version of the song, stylistically," → "Stylistically, the original version of the song
  • "a great deal compared to the final edit;" → "a great deal in comparison to the final edit;"
  • "compared this version to catalogue" → "compared the original to the catalogue"
  • "behind each of the sixteen tracks" → "behind each of the 16 tracks"
  • "she revealed that" → "she stated that"
  • "with the" → "that came with the"
  • "She stated that" → "Marina said that"
  • "from a discussion Marina had had" → "from a discussion she previously had"
  • "falling from grace"." → "falling from grace.""
  • "Some music critics discussed how" → "Certain critical commentary discussed how"
  • "who stood up in defense" → "that stood up in defense"
  • "against American producer Dr. Luke;" → "against record producer Dr. Luke;"
  • "worked with Dr. Luke for her single" → "worked with him on her single"
  • Add release year of the single in brackets
  • "other songs that appear on her second studio album," → "other songs that are included on her second studio album"
  • "Further in her interview with Apple Music, she continued:" → "In her interview with Apple Music, Marina continued:"
  • "there’s really been" → "there's really been"
  • "didn’t really think" → "didn't really think"
  • "The lyrics to the song find" → "The lyrics of "Karma" see"
  • "think it's karma'"." → "think it's karma.'"" with the wikilink
  • "with the song," → "in the lyrics,"
  • "she felt with a common theme" → "she noted as a common theme"
  • Remove The Diamondback sentence per WP:RSSM

Critical reception

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  • Maybe add more reviews if they exist?
  • "Marina’s lyrical assertiveness" → "Marina's lyrical assertiveness"
  • "not to be reckoned with"." → "not to be reckoned with.""
  • "speculated that the sound" → "commented that the sound"
  • "but claimed that her" → "but admitted that her"
  • "mean she’s not too" → "mean she's not too"
  • "damnably infectious"," → "damnably infectious,""
  • "fell flat compared to her" → "fell flat in comparison to Marina's"

Promotion

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Music video

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  • "accompanied by two backup singers" → "while accompanied by two backup singers" on the img main text
  • "An official music video for "Karma" was" → "A music video for the acoustic version of "Karma" was" with the wikilink
  • "account on 25 September 2019." → "channel on 25 September 2019."
  • "the final of three released to promote" → "the final of three to be released for promoting"
  • "The clip for "Karma" depicts" → "The music video depicts"
  • "sparkly corset"." → "sparkly corset.""

Live performances

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  • The first sentence should be removed as it lacks focus
  • "She appeared as a musical guest" → "Marina appeared as a musical guest"
  • "on 4 September of the same year," → "on 4 September 2019,
  • "in the accompanying music video." → "in the acoustic version's music video."
  • "consisted of Marina dancing" → "featured her dancing"
  • "the appearance on the show" → "Marina's appearance on the show"
  • "confidence and polish" and" → "confidence and polish," and"
  • "to have paid off"." → "to have paid off.""
  • Should you refer as "the concert" or "the tour"?
  • "of songs like 2015" → "of songs, including 2015"
  • "not disappoint"." → "not disappoint.""

Track listing

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  • Good

Credits and personnel

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  • Wikilink/target the musicians mentioned
  • Shouldn't engineer and assistant engineer be swapped in their order?

Release history

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  • Remove the version column
  • Remove the April 2019 release as that was as part of the album
  • Are you sure digital download is a release format since that is from Spotify you are citing?

References

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  • Copyvio score looks decent at 37.9%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Remove the date parameter from ref 8's citations
  • Remove or replace ref 18 per WP:RSSM
  • Wikilink YouTube on ref 21
  • Wikilink Consequence of Sound on ref 26
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Carbrera You are supposed to mention in the production sentence that he is "of Clean Bandit". --K. Peake 08:13, 29 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake – Fixed it. Carbrera (talk) 18:58, 29 August 2020 (UTC).[reply]
Carbrera You placed the info in the wrong area but I fixed that for you, article can now ✓ Pass! --K. Peake 07:02, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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