Talk:Kanche/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 16:39, 26 February 2016 (UTC)

• "During the filming of Vedam (2010) in Vishakhapatnam, Krish visited a museum which displayed a bomb dropped by the Imperial Japanese Army on the city during World War II. " -do we know the museum?

No. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "Krish worked on the film's screenplay for nine-and-a-half months, " -and spent the other half month arguing with Krimuk90 on wikipedia right? ;-)

Well, that didn't happen and i am happy for that. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• Google search engine -link?

Linked with Google Search. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:23, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "January 2015; Ramoji Rao was to produce the film under the banner Ushakiron Movies jointly with Krish's banner First Frame Entertainment.[4] Pragya Jaiswal, who auditioned for Gabbar Is Back, was signed as the film's female lead.[5] The film was officially launched on 27 February 2015 in Hyderabad and was titled Kanche.[6] Kanche translates to fence in English and Krish relates that the film focuses on the effects of a fence on friendship.[7] On the 75th anniversary of World War II, Krish told the Indo-Asian News Service on 1 September 2015" -I think you can avoid saying 2015 in the second two instances.

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:27, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• ". Krish called Rao's cameo " -Krish described Rao's cameo as a colorful one?

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:33, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "Razole, East Godavari district of Andhra Pradesh" -add "in" before East

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:33, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "a 1940's tone." -try "in the 1940s style".
• "The construction of the palace where Sitadevi lives took four to five days to complete and ₹4 million was spent" -try ", at a cost of ₹4 million" after "complete"
• "The film's crew accepted the help of the Government of Georgia and huge sets were erected, which included a German military base camp. " -try "With the assistance of the Government of Georgia, huge sets were erected, including a German military base camp fitted with trenches and bunkers"

All of them, Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:43, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "Georgia, East Russia" -Georgia is not in Russia, it is an independent country!

Poor in Geography since childhood. :) Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:43, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "For the film's shoot, Krish hired a few telegraph machines, typewriters, and coffee cups and saucers manufactured during the timeline of the World War II.[18] Some key action sequences were filmed in a few old, dilapidated buildings located near Georgia and Varun Tej performed his stunts without a body double. " -this is poorly constructured, you'd making three different points at once. The whole section could probably do with some copyediting and shifting around to improve structure.

Dr. Blofeld, Do you think the flow is better now? Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:47, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• " tabla tarang and sarod " -perhaps put what they are in brackets for non Indian readers
• "The song "Itu Itu Ani Chitikelu Evvarivo" was composed using Natabhairavi raga; the song "Bhaga Bhagamani" was composed using Kamavardani raga; the song "Raa Mundadugeddam" was composed using both Charukesi and Kamavardani ragas.[27]" -can you find a way to reword and avoid repeating "composed"?

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• In the release section you can avoid saying "2015" after first instance.

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• " Devi Dundoo of The Hindu called Kanche a film that does not: "stand out merely by being different, but also because it’s earnest". Dundoo added: "Step across the fence to a new world of storytelling, [Krish] seems to say. He doesn’t do this like a fence sitter — wanting to push the envelope but holding back for box office acceptance — he just plunges in"." -awkward wording. I've reworded and shortened it.

Thanks for the help, Dr. Blofeld! :) Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• "and praised Krish's choice of genre and stated: "" -avoiding repeating "and", trying changing to ", stating" after genre

Done. Rephrased the sentence. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:22, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

• Box office section, can you avoid repeating the word "gross/ing a few times?♦ Dr. Blofeld 15:18, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

Reduced to four instances. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:27, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Though the structure in the production section in places might still be sharper this is very well written and meets the GA criteria. Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:41, 28 February 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Dr. Blofeld! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 16:55, 28 February 2016 (UTC)